NO!!!!!!

To my despair, he said, "Spanish. I'm not good at it though. Will you help me with it?" He asked me.

 

I didn't know what else to say, so I said, "Uh... Sure. Are you sure you won't be showed around by them?" I asked, yet again.

 

"Yes, why do you keep asking me these questions?" He asked as he shuffled his feet nervously. I looked at my locker suddenly aware that I've made the guy nervous.

 

"I don't know. Because they're just dying to show you around." I said, not knowing exactly why I've said it.

 

"That's why I'm trying to stay away from them. They're trouble."

 

"You don't think I know that? I've been at school with them since 6th grade. I used to be friends with them until they got me in trouble. And trust me, don't get on their bad side. Especially Taylor. She'll get you suspended for just knowing me." I warned him.

 

"Wow. Now I really want to stay away from them." He said. Great. That backfired.

 

"Yeah, well look out. If you stay away from me, then you'll be safe." I hoped that worked.

 

"Well, can you at least show me to Spanish?" he asked. Fine, be stubborn.

 

"Sure, if you still want to." I shut my locker door and locked it quickly. Then I walked with Dave to Spanish, which was also my homeroom. Unfortunately.

 

"Chloe, que es esto, y ¿por qué tarde?" Mrs. Martinez asked me.

 

"Sra. Martinez, Se trata de Dave, es nuevo. Llego tarde porque tenía problemas para llegar a mi casillero." I told her. She asked me who Dave was and why I was late. I told her about Dave, but lied about having locker trouble. Well, kind of. You see, Taylor kept blocking my way in front of my locker until Sarah left. She wouldn't let me use my locker at all. They only left because Dave walked in from the school door and strolled in the hallways to Principal Sarri's office. So it was not that much of a lie.

 

"Miss Cole, it better not happen again." Mrs Martinez looked at me with her glasses down, frowning, and spoke with a cold, stern voice that always gave me chills down my back. Especially when she talked to me. This was her usual "Welcome to Spanish 3, The Class of Doom!" intro.

 

"Yes, Mrs. Martinez. It won't ever happen again." I said, taking my seat. Then even worse things happened. Mrs. Martinez told Dave to sit in the empty seat behind me. Oh great, what other classes do we have together, I wonder?

Author's Note

Okay, it's finally up. Sorry for the long wait, but I've been moving to a new house, school, and rainbow.... So let's just say that I'm overworked this past month. Oh well, did you enjoy it?

I'd like more input on it, since it's longer, and more into the story.

How'd you like the new characters I've put in it?

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

An the story continues, however I wouldn't have seperated this from the first chapter, my advice would be, not to sound prudent, but I'd almost put this back in a prolouge type first page.

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[Lou Briggs]

This doesn’t need to be a separate chapter; tagging it along to the end of the first one makes sense, and will suffice.

How does he know she’s good at Spanish? She might take French, or German.

Showed around by who?

When did Dave go to the Principal’s office? I was under the impression that he just followed her inside.

I’m not quite feeling a high school vibe from this whole situation – it’s very middle school. If it helps, watch the movie “10 Things I Hate About You”, one of the quintessential high school movies. It offers a real taste of high school, highlighting the ugly parts. Right now, this story sounds more like “Ned’s Declassified School Survival Guide”.

-Lou

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[Jessi Berlasty]

"H(h)e asked me." "H(h)e asked as he shuffled" "for just knowing me.(,)" I warned" "away from them.(,)" H(h)e said." "ever happen again.(,)" I said"

Your writing is really improving. Great job. Just a few grammatical mistakes. :-)

[Teenage Romeo]

good!

[brenda]

wow ! this is great i dont like taylor shes mean i love this story !!

[Short.Nerd]

I like it:)

[M Garcia]

Very interesting. Its interesting and keeps the writer invovled. I'll read more.

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice beginning. I like the conversation and the way the new boy is falling into her life. Poor Spanish teacher is made to be hard. But teachers must maintain control. A very good chapter.
Coyote

[Norma M Sutton]

Sounds good so far :)