Story: Lightbearer's Folly

Chasing an idea I had. I've seen & read things touching on this same subject. Here is my variation to it.

Lightbearer's Folly
By Dave Doc Rogers
20090101

His eyes surveyed all in front of him. He inhaled deeply of the power that was all around him. "This is mine," he thought.

Stretching in front of him was a multitude of people. They seemed to ebb and flow like a great sea. Some would gather together and crest like a great tidal surge. All of them sang in intricate, multi-choral voices. The volume of the voices would roll like thundering waves toward where he stood. He would receive their praise unto himself and hold it. It was beyond thrilling to the touch. It was nearly intoxicating.

The number of them seemed incalculable, yet he knew exactly their number, name, and where they were. He had performed this service so long and so often he could not recount the number of times. He would get lost in the moment of the revelry and lose awareness of time, space, and anything else except the flow and ebb of their praise. All he could see was the ebb and flow of these beings of immense power projecting their love, adoration, praise, and inner selves toward him.

He inhaled deeply. "This is mine," he thought.

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"I tell you truly!" he shouted in a voice that thundered as a deep rumble through those assembled before him. "I feel your power � I feel your praise � I worship you for your giving yourselves unselfishly to me �"

A roar sounded deep within the massed press and slowly swelled overcoming the deep rumble of the first speaker. In a flash of a moment the sound crested and there stood before them all a being of magnificent fury and strength. All fell back from him, save one. The eyes of this interloper burned fiercely in the direction of the first speaker. When he spoke it was as if the firmament itself moved at the sounding. "Lucifer, Light Bearer, what is it that you do this day, this very hour? Do you not realize what it is you say?"

Lucifer fell back just a moment under the onslaught of the voice and pure power of the one before him. Straightening himself up to his fullest stature, Lucifer took a step toward the one whose voice shook even the firmament.

"Me'kael!?! Who is like EL? Do you set yourself up to be like HIM? Are you, whose voice sounds as thunder to shake even the heavens, now, sitting in judgment over us all? Who are you to confront me? Am I not the one who has received even your praise, Almighty One?"

At this there was a stirring, a murmur within the gathering multitude.

"Ware your next words, Light Bearer!" the voice shouted. The nearest at the center of the discussion of these two great beings were thrown back by the intensity of Me'kael's warning.

Lucifer felt it coming. He after uncounted eons knew the most subtle of emotions and had steadied himself for the blast. Focusing intently, he turned inward and touched that which he had stored for such a day as this. What had grown as a thought seed had matured into a force unto itself. He touched that now and drew it forth out of his being.

A burst of power and pent up energy sprang forth out of the Light Bearer. All but the most stout were thrown back, disarmed by the intensity now emanating from this being. It was a light, an energy that poured and radiated out of him.

"I WILL BE LIKE THE MOST HIGH!"

There was a deafening roar. The firmament upon which they stood shook violently. Those who had been standing a side watching the interplay between these two great beings quickly chose sides. Fully one third of those attending stood with the Light Bearer whose energy only seemed to intensify as they gathered closer and closer around him.

"I WILL ASCEND THE MOUNTAIN OF THE NORTH AND I WILL SET MY THRONE IN THE MIDST OF THE MOUNT OF ASSEMBLY!!"

In mass, they encircled the Light Bearer and began to move as one body toward the Mount of Assembly. Lucifer's eyes were on the Throne of Meeting. He said in his heart he would attain it. He could feel the life in those around him. He began to feed off of them and his intensity grew.

Me'kael and just a few stood between those that were with Lucifer and the Throne of Meeting. Me'kael withdrew the Great Sword that was entrusted to him and struck repeated into those in front of him. Lucifer's intensity grew at the chaos of battle and the intensity of the emotions around him. He sucked into himself in the same manner he had carried praise in the past. He was becoming intoxicated, drunk with the power. He tossed all aside as he approached them. A surge of his allies stood against Me'kael, the Great Sword, and those with him. Lucifer was able to easily walk around the warring thunders and flashings of lightning.

The firmament shook violently with the efforts of so many in opposition, one against another. The Light Bearer smiled. He was drunk, full on the wine of their emotions and � hatred. This was new to him. He breathed it in. He took a step on to the base that was the mount of meeting. His intensity heightened again as he neared his goal. A roar below him told him that Me'kael saw his failure was eminent. Just a few steps more and �

Glare. Intensity all around Lucifer. A brilliance he had never experienced surrounded him and went through him, and then a fear like he had never known before gripped him. He knew he had reached the apex of the Mount of Assembly. Before him should have been the Throne of meeting. Instead he felt the intensity of a being far greater than his imagining. He could not see a distance to measure the height or depth of this being.

'I AM THAT I AM'

The words echoed through the center of the Light Bearer and tore at all of his deceptions.

"YOU SHALL HAVE NO OTHER GODS BEFORE ME!"

Great fear fell upon the Light Bearer and a grip whose strength had no measure surrounded him. He heard the wails of those below as he was lifted up. He had a sensation of speed beyond his imagining.

The sudden stop was beyond sensation he could comprehend. A part of him was missing. A despair greater than his pain assailed him. He began to wail, mournfully wracking his self. He was stripped of his light. He was in utter darkness. He reached out to what he once knew and there was a gulf he could not cross. His soul darkened to match his surroundings.

Time passed without measure. There was no sight. There was no sound. There was only pain and despair as companions. They weighed constantly against him. Then he heard a faint sound that did not come from him. In a flash he was at it. He felt for it. Touched it. It was one of the multitude that had followed him.

"WHY DID YOU FAIL ME!!!? I WAS YOUR LORD! IWAS YOUR GOD! COULD YOU NOT STAND UP TO HIM ON MY BEHALF!"

He continued to beat the being until he was spent. With the last of his strength, he threw it as far as he could away from him. As his anger waned, pain and despair returned to companion him � until he heard a sound �

He began to number those he punished for failing him. They began to follow him at a safe distance. At any moment he would turn and vent his wrath upon them until he was spent. He would suck out any hope they might have and leave them with pain and despair at their failure. He was not to be faulted. They failed him, the mighty one in whom they held their hope.

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�2009 Dave Doc Rogers

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Author's Note

Ignore grammar. I don't need grammarians. I need honest feedback. :)

Reviews

[Carole]

Spell binding. Very descriptive, Doc. I enjoyed the read and it kept my attention. I think you have something here. I love how you took a segment of the Bible and expounded on it. A little repetitive in the first couple paragraphs. I know you aren't looking for grammarians, but I would watch my repeating the same words. Over all, I thought it was a great read. Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to more.

[Ravenskald]

I liked this a subtle retelling of the tale
smile you seem to be taking Dantes Line
Me I prefer Milton and paint it black
thanks for the excellent story

R

[Starsong]

Wow. Captivating. I have never read the fall of Lucifer like this. If you plan to expound on this, continue the story, I would like a little more description about the firmament, the multitudes, the battle. As it is, a very good piece. I could almost see the light, the energy, hear the thundering voices. Keep it up!!

[TL Boehm]

I'm a bit disappointed that more have not reviewed this although I suppose I shouldn't be. So many seem to prefer 'candy' to the meat of a real story. But this is incredible. I feel like cheese compared to this...

[SM Davis]

wow! I am humbled to my core with this! This shows me humility in the perfection of your mechanics, and the complexity of words that meld together smoothly as silk. I have much to learn...WELL DONE!!!!!

[Ryan Jaimz Knight]

I found this...I don't know...I would have to read it again at a later time, but I will say that I find it daring and bold to write a story from the perspective of one of the greatest antagonists and enemies known to mankind. A very interesting POV indeed!

RJK