Somebody

I've dreamed about this . . . A girl walking below the clouds . . .

Today is a blowout,

It's a nice day to go out.

By the time that i was walking,

I saw somebody sleeping.

So i went there to see,

Who is that somebody?

But when i was there,

I saw nothing but a fruit pear.

So from the shade of the dark,

I went to rest in the park.

I was sitting on the swing

And thought about him.

Then a guy in front me stood steady,

He said,"Hi, you look lonely".

Reviews

[Ethereal Melody]

Interesting. There's a kind of playful tone to it that almost makes me curious. However, this honestly seems like something I would write during a semi-horrible case of The Block. The rhymes come off as forced and a few of the lines just seem slapped together. But like I said, the tone was very intriguing. I'd love to read more of your work sometime.

~ EM

[Shannon]

Unusual rhymes. The couplets create a carefree quality.

[Djourrisse Appleby]

Whaa! I'm really not an expert in writing. Haha. This poem was like 5 or 6 years ago.

[Sami Khalil]

Interesting write...:).........

[Djourrisse Appleby]

Thank you! The inspiration was from a weird dream though.

[Sami Khalil]

Good. You are welcome. ...:))))