Deadly Love

My fingers closed around your neck

And you struggled to breathe...

Was it love I saw in your eyes,

As you stared back at me?

Foolish... Foolish girl.

You couldn't make me change!

At least not in time,

To see my heart repent.

You should have told the world

Pain is how I showed my love.

And found yourself a gentler soul,

To give you what I'm incapable of.

But you loved me strong,

And you loved me true.

That, my dear...

Was the death of you.

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Deriving gratification from one's own pain or humiliation seems to be the theme of this hauntingly macabre write. There is a word for this … but I will just say ‘interesting’ and good word structure to convey the message within the text!

[Jessica Lima]

I like writing poems from the villain's point of view. Abusive relationships are so common. I wonder what the abuser tell themselves as to why the victim stays. I couldn't figure it out.... Thanks for the review.

[Paul Bell]

Well that was short.
Not so sweet.
But hell, i liked the end.
Am i being indiscreet.

[Jessica Lima]

lol. I liked it too. Of course I am against abuse but there is beauty in pain... when it isn't your own. Is there not? :)

[Paul Bell]

Sure is. Though i didn't say that.

[Jessica Lima]

Of course you didn't. I did silly. Thanks for the review.

[Hope]

This is different.
We read poems about love lost love found but this is so unique!
I like your style :)

[rowan.taylorrr]

this is very powerful. i really like the way it's written & i love the wording you use

[Jessica Lima]

Thank You. I like writing things from the villains point of view. Much more interesting.

[Mr.Writer]

Woah, I love this poem Jessica!
It really engaged me and I enjoyed alot!
The emotions of being scared, in pain and in love reflect upon this poem...
Keep it up :)

[Jessica Lima]

Thanks! It's been a while since I've written anything... Missed it a bunch!