Pills, Thrills, and Daphadills

Sighting of the night's sky melts my heart in a way I figured impossible for anu single one ever could.
That was untill I me you.
The stars couldn't compare to your words.
The moon was no sighy compared to gazing into your eyes.
The night, irrelevent in your pressence.
At least that's what I thought.
Untill you decieved me.
Leaving me to wither and burn in the morning's rays.
Your back turned, I the pheonix rise from my ashes you left me in.
Now, mind unleashed I can fly to far away.
Go meet the night's stars.
Only now I realize the moon was my muse.
The stars were my voice.
I the pheonix rise from my ashes you left me as.
New, wise, and filled with purpose.
So I thank you false love, for recipricating your purpose in complete favor of your own.
Because only now I can see, this was our together.
For I to grow strong for my new universe tomorrow.

Reviews

[Hannah Messer]

There were definitely some typos that you may just want to fix, and I wasn't sure what the title had to do with it, so that kind of threw me off a little, but I liked where you were going with the overall purpose of it. With thinking you had this super great thing going on, and then reaiizing that it was this total other thing, but that it doesn't take away from your strength. I think wiith a tiny bit of editing you'd be right there!

[DizzyLlama]

Thank you. I know my spelling is horrible I wish spell check worked! As for the title, the poembegins with the high of love(pills) then turns into a kind of stressful situation (thrills) and the finally blooming into a flower (daphadills) It makes more sense in my head. Again thank you for your feed back it's always good to recieve.