You and I

Just writing without thinking again

I've looked upon your face,

for so long I've wished.

And this night I dream of you. 

Come away with me.

Come to the depths.

Glide now over to me,

That way that you do.

I'm going crazy.

And when I dream with you,

I wonder if you will ever be this good again.

Please dont ask me to stop. 

I want to be with you.

And with all that I know

I know I'm out of my mind.

And yet I sing 

Singing with you, 

I feel alive for once in my life.

All I want from you is to keep going

and dont stop until we get there

I dream 

I scream when I cant feel alive 

and I yell when I dont feel real 

please dont leave me alone tonight. 

Author's Note

like I said writing... not thinking too much

Reviews

[Buzz_Reynolds]

writing without thinking often brings out more than anything! nice, interesting write!

[piggy]

was i supposed to read the crossed out words or not?

otherwise it was a great thing to write down

[Dilan Gray]

I really like this poem, I love the emotion and the images. Great job!

[bluessadmood]

i love writing without thinking ,it comes crude and natural and true
i loved you talking to him..he is like the part thats missing
the part thats you will always need..something in here was so deep
always dreamed of you ,walk with me,to the end,you keep my sanity
how it feels good with you,dont hush me,i am losing my mind ,though
keep singing of you,was always alive with you..lets keep on
i dream ,i scream,wanna be with you,your touch feels so alive
pease dont leave ,dont leave specially tonight
something very strong and unique in these words ..just loved it
lovely write..

[Rachel Koepke]

you are a great poet and a very strong poet........with very strong writing....the last three lines are my favorite :))

[.]

"I'm going crazy.
And when I dream with you,
I wonder if you will ever be this good again.
Please dont ask me to stop.
I want to be with you.
And with all that I know
I know I'm out of my mind."
~~wow-u r a great talent-keep writing~~
(Excellent)

:)

[Frank F. Atanacio]

another great write-- you are a poet :)

[Doug Ordunio]

Beautiful and touching sentiments. This has lots of potential

[absolutefolie]

Just wow, very touching :)

[serpent]

this is one of those "oh, so beautiful piece"...has got a touch of sensuality to it...the way she wants her lover to stay and live the dream with her is a moment that will be any lover's delight...i am not sure if any mortal can ignore these words as walk away..
beautifull penned!