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It's that time of the year..It is meant to be placed in her hand with a rose as beautiful as her, a token for her to remember me on her birthday..I just hope that it will happen..

Oh so fair, and yet so bright

that is the woman which I dream of every night

her mists of beauty and charm of light

have left me blind, taking all of my sight

Despite all my woe and all disarray

her smiling glimpse left me nothing but whirry and wary

seeking the path to my one true love

finding her unsettling heart

I love you, there is no more to say

I wish you hadn't looked the other way

And here I am, chilled and frozen in my blanket of hopes and dreams

waiting for you to come and set me free

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Anjelica Allen]

I love your language. I normally prefer more variation in the rhyme scheme, but you actually pulled it off. This is beautifully sad.

[Disregarded]

I'm glad you find it beautiful, it's just too personal and heart ripping for me to say it like that, though I highly appreciate your kind and heart warming words. You have my sincere gratitude.

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

Tearjerkingly emotional. Really liked this.

[Disregarded]

Tearjerkingly..Outstanding way of expression , first time I hear, surprised and touched at the same time, thank you.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

quite emotional but i have to wonder about these words
"disarry" & "whirry "
beside that, its quite nice

[Disregarded]

as in their meaning or is their place suitable in that line?

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

meaning!

[Disregarded]

well first of all "disarry" should be "disarray" I have a spelling mistake there, and it means when you are in a state of disorganization, I used it as every piece has fallen and is not in its place and I am unaware of its whereabouts, whirry on the other hand means that you are in haste, you hurry to the next step, I used it as I am hurrying to look and find the next step to us may it be our only salvation left. Hope I helped :)

[Faith]

Beautiful.

[Phillitup]

This poem is very deep. You know, I once read somewhere that a poet can say more in one word than a writer can say in one page. Yup. It's so true, as perfectly shown here. Nice work and very eloquently penned! Best regards, Dell

[Disregarded]

Thank you, I appreciate your words , to be honest I never did expect positive feedback only negative criticism, so I am pleased with your review as I am surprised.

[Phillitup]

You should never feel that way about your masterpieces.

[Wolfwind]

The first stanza was a WOW of awesome! It's beautifully romantic and sounds heartfelt. The second stanza comes across as a reply of what had been and what was felt. The third stanza comes across almost as a "poor me, give me a second chance"

I wish you the best of luck on being set free! It's good to hold that hope.

Keep the ink flowing!
Aaron

[Disregarded]

Thank you very much, the day is suppose to be today, and well...hope all goes better than worse..