Rotten Teeth

People are dying, children are crying,

And I´m just sitting here laughing, 

Guess I´m a little off in the head,

Probably better off dead, 

And it´s a bittersweet life we create,

Trying to fix our realities with duct tape,

And it´s all about the poses we mimic,

But they all tell me I´m a cynic, 

And I think I´m numbing the ghost of you away,

Just to play the role of someone else for a little while,

Rotten teeth and misguided heads are now in style,

But I still don´t know if this is what it feels like to be myself,

And the cracks in my face can never forgive my mistakes,

Ever since I held on tight to your candy-coated bait, 

And now I realize I´m not the person they once adored,

Ever since I grew out of my shell, I doubt if they love me anymore, 

Guess I´m stuck here inside of this Hell,

But still I beg for you to save me from myself,

Floating in and out across crowded rooms and empty shelves,

I never saw your shadow coming so I assume you didn´t hear my calls, 

Ashes to ashes up against the crumbling walls, 

And they never really notice when I´m there,

Although I don´t think they´ll ever really care, 

So take me apart and glue the pieces back together,

Ties you can never sever,

We´ll be this way forever. 

Author's Note

This poem probably makes no sense whatsoever, but I would greatly appreciate it if you would let me know your thoughts anyway.

Reviews

[Bear]

I take this as a self-dissection and of society as you see it? First let me say that you had some killer rhyme going at the start and your mimic/cynic match up was fantastic. And the wording in many of your lines are slamming (And I think I´m numbing the ghost of you away) is one of the best. The abstract style may not be popular with many people because much of it goes over the head of outsiders, normals and plain speak humans. Well done my friend, I hope you experiment more with this style because it will fun to see what comes out of that creative mind of yours :~)
I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap1

[dramamine]

Thank you so much Bear, I always look forward to reading your reviews. I really appreciate it and I am sorry that I never reply to them, well until now I guess but really thank you again you just made my entire week :)

[Kuro]

This would make a great song. I noticed you want to start a band, you could be a singer-songwriter.

[Johnny Jack]

It's not bad at all. Creepy in a sense which makes it better but it does make sense if you understand it's meaning. The way you have it typed is a little hectic and may seem a little to fast paced for poetry but I'm human too so... Impressive.