Terminal

There’s something in the way.

Underneath all these shades of gray.

Where I’m alone and wishing to stay.

Thrown away, I’ve become the prey.

The tarp is leaking and my needle is speaking.

It tears a hole, leaving me pleading.

I’ve been seeking, left repeating.

I’m at the bottom, barely breathing and drowning in the ashes of my memories.

Faded places and forgotten faces are my enemies.

There’s something in the way.

My brain is left to decay.

The maggots eat away.

Living off of drippings from my ceiling.

It’s okay, I am left without feeling.

There’s something in the way.

I won’t live to see another day.   

Author's Note

Greatly inspired by the song Something In The Way by Nirvana, one of my favorite songs of all time. Anyway please let me know your thoughts.

Reviews

[Bear]

Nice rhyme scheme and word choices, true rhymes each one and an interesting perspective. Alone with just yourself as target for your memories, to die a horrible death and watch as the ravages of time decompose you. I like dark poetry because there is no candy coating, it's real and need to be seen for what it is, a fact of life. Thank you for inviting me.

[Emily]

I love the way you ended it!
Keep it up!!

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You've incorporated the sentiment of the song perfectly within the lines of this piece, Twiggy. Cobain spent some time, living beneath a bridge that has become a place of pilgrimage for his loyal fans and it is said he had the lyrics to "Something in the Way" spray painted in that place he lived after he was thrown out of his home. He said that each time he tried to move forward there was something in his way, preventing him. We all have obstacles in life, and from time to time, many of us are either homeless or we feel mentally homeless, when something eats away at us from the inside... as I read this I saw the 'needle...holes...maggots' and so on, as 'obstacles', preventing you from moving forward; preventing the healing. And there is nothing wrong with borrowing the title of a song to crown your poem as you have sourced it :), and we all borrow lines or phrases or titles from work that inspires us. This is a fine tribute to the song while holding true to your own interpretation. Well-done.