Hush

Hush now child don’t fear us, there’s no need.

We’re only here to make you bleed, to make you plead.

To make your screams silent.

Hush now child the pain you feel will soon end.

We blend in, you will not know when we pretend.

Do not worry my child, this is for the best.

Your death will be our salvation.

Hush now child we must infest and make your soul our nest.

We must abuse your innocence.

This is only a test, we’re all slaves and death is our master.

We plaster our smiles. We pile the lonely bones in the demon’s mile.

Hush now child this is merely our lifestyle.

We were sheltered from reality long ago.

We put on this show, but only we know. 

Hush now child do not weep, let us reap.

Please now you must stay asleep.

Your corpse will not be cheap.

So hush now my child, we’re only here to sell, farewell.

Reviews

[Bear]

Very dark and morose in the nature of Edger Allan Poe. You rhyme scheme is pretty good but the flow is a little sketchy, I have read it three times and each time I get caught up on the fifth line. (We blend in, you will not know when we pretend.) I think it is because you have the three sound alike words 1"blend in" 2"know when" 3"we pretend. Have you had someone read this poem out loud to you so you can hear it? I think you will hear what I am saying and if you don't have anyone to read it you can always download a program like Natural Reader text to speech software http://www.naturalreaders.com/ it is a great writing tool. I like your story line it is haunting and just creepy enough to make the hair on my arm to stand. Oh and on the last line did you mean to sell or say farewell?

[T.Y Abdul]

Wow, creepy and scary . . . but great poem there. I like the blend and how it sounds like a whisper. Hush is a word that goes a long way.

[I Am Svetlana]

Such a chilling piece with such a haunting tone! Sounds like a sacrifice is going to be made. Trying to calm someone down before you kill them...very creepy.

[Not here]

that looks like slenderman in the picture :) creepy and great poem too. gave me shivers

[Dani The Unreviewed]

This was a really dark read. Well written. Its like listening to a few people talking about how many ways they can take the innocence of a child... Which paints the image of sick minds. Nicely done :)

[dramamine]

Thank you! I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem. Thanks again :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You're welcome :)

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Such a quiet and haunting write, Twiggy... there is a darkness about it that is chilling; a 'monster' soothing the child while explaining the gruesome nature of its purpose - to completely take innocence away. It could fit a number of scenarios, one uglier than the next... the title and calming tone definitely work in the poem's favour, creating an eerie uneasiness the whole way through... great write!