Banquet at Moonshine, Sunset, and the Dark Ages

Banquet at Moonshine, Sunset, and the Dark Ages

A Chapter by DiskartetHaraya
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Complex sentence structure. Momentarily de-familiarizing the blasé.

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At the garden
by the window of that social gathering
I stand by and you approach.
the third light, which stays permanently
neither on the outside nor the inside
or by the window with its radiance, how nice it is
for you to speak to me.
Do you not want to come inside? Why,
You caress with your voice.
I? Not on this second… perhaps.
I ask you, what do you think of the glassware they use for the wine?
You respond with a sincere smile, connoting
that inquiring for opinion on the host’s taste in glassware
instead of in wine is queer and amusing,
yet we both know what we’re conversing on
is the conservative question of whether these glasses
are a pair of quarter empty or a set of two-eighths full.


© 2017 DiskartetHaraya


Author's Note

DiskartetHaraya
First posted in my not-so-active DeviantArt account (Mahjorin), then on my up-to-date FB page (Nook of Ruth).

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I can more tell about feelings . I am not really good to make any reviews. I can feel here warmth while over conversation from window with your friend. I was thinking if you broke up sentences and move with words around you can make quite wonderful mix of emotions. Just like when people get happy drunk. This is only thing what i can say about it. How say it's make nice feeling of connection. thanks for that.

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I can more tell about feelings . I am not really good to make any reviews. I can feel here warmth while over conversation from window with your friend. I was thinking if you broke up sentences and move with words around you can make quite wonderful mix of emotions. Just like when people get happy drunk. This is only thing what i can say about it. How say it's make nice feeling of connection. thanks for that.

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Thank you for the feedback. It's still valuable to know what readers feel. I tend to use my brain mo.. read more
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I am happy my comment have good impact. I have another problem. My writing go more through the emoti.. read more

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Added on October 20, 2017
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Tags: perspective, psychology, pretentious, high society, flirtation, cliche


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Hiraya or haraya? Whichever, I need to get myself a Filipino dictionary. The word means imagination, while the other word (diskarte) has something to do with street smarts or being business-minded.. more..

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