Compartment 114
Compartment 114
Charlie
Fly the plane
The blade's pain

The blade's pain

A Poem by Dische

What way the best for us
Seemed like the worst
It was best if we just went back
To being friends
I cried all night
When you told me that
I couldn't think
I couldn't breathe
It ruined me
I couldn't think of you without crying
I couldn't talk to you without crying
I couldnt even look at pictures of you
I was cutting myself
Watching it bleed
Thinking the blood
Would save me
I thought that the pain
Of the blAde
Would take my mind off of
The real pain
But it didn't and I regret it now
Because I have cuts
But that's not the point
The point is
That the breakup is what hurt
But it's only been a day
And I'm realizing what happened
Is a good thing
Because our friendship is a good thing
It a great thing
The best thing that ever happened to me
Our friendship matters more to me
Then anYthing else
So I'm happy now
That we could keep that
I need our friendship like I need the sun
So I will get over you
Try to stop loving you
Find somebody else
Almost as good as you

© 2011 Dische


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Its really emo, not really my style, but for a 13 year old, I can tell you're going places!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love this, it has a bittersweet feel to it and I love the realization towards the end. It was really well written! Great poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Yet again your poetic style and descriptive language has left me stunned and amazed your a true talent I loved this piece very well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


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It's a poem speaks to our hearts immediately, After our first love came to an end we would feel that our whole life did as well, the world has stopped...
But the next day we'd realize that nothing stopped, the sun is still rising and the wind is still blowing, nothing has changed but a part of our hearts has died... trust me that won't last somebody else will bring the life to your heart in a way you would be surprised it could actually exists, there is no cut you could do would stop the pain in your heart cause it's the hardest pain... All you can do is hang on tight until this storm leaves your sky, and everything always will be fine again... You did a wonderful job, this poem touched me deeply :) Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice :P I liked it ahelluvalot xD

Great style keep it coming :P

Fallen

Posted 13 Years Ago


Friendships are worth fighting for. Who knows if your friendship grows and blossoms you might unite in love again later down the road. Perhaps all of the elements for love will be just right then?

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is pretty sad. I liked it though because lots of ppl have been through this. Sounds like you wrote it from your heart :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


That is really cool and fore some people true. I liked it beacause it reminds me of someone special to me and what would happen to me if he was gone. It reminds me to cherrish him. This is a wounderful writing thank you for putting it here.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Pros: You know, when the person I love told me we could never be together again, I did what you did. I cried and I cut. But now, I just don't want to lose her. She means the world to me, and even if we can't be more than friends, I'll be happy as long as I have her in some way. You expressed this very, very well. To the point, too, which I like.

Cons: None.

Overall: I really like this. Especially the last four lines. They are my favorite, especially the last one. It hit home with me.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Dische
Dische

Halifax, sault ste marie, Nova scotia, ontario, Canada



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Hi my name is Adam. I am 13 years old and started writing a few months ago. A lot of my work is sad because for me happiness doesn't come often. Unfortunately. Poetry is one of the only things I have .. more..

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