Walked Away

I realized that they won't care. None would remember me. Neither would they mourn for I was the one different from them. Thus I took a step forward. I took the flight of steps that didn't exist.

 

I felt light hearted as free fall was all I could manage then.

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[Eleanor]

In just a few lines you again explained the readers everything!
I'm against self killing! All those people are needed.
And I loved your use of metaphor in it. They way you told to let the thoughts go not the body.
Great writing this is!

[AprilRN1210]

it does feel quite alienated to be different sometimes.. I can definitely relate to that.. I like the way you left this open for interpretation.. the emotion is there and powerful.. one small suggestion.. (just my opinion).. would probably delete "even" from the second line.. flows better.. very powerful piece in such few words.. that takes skill.. well done!..

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Thanks April for the insightful review.

[AprilRN1210]

you're more than welcome.. it was my pleasure.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Well its too short of a piece for my taste. But i don't like long worthless crap too
.i would really like to comtradict others.it was not that you physically walked away from others..the solitude was self imposed. and the freefall was of thoughts not of body. I looked at this piece in a metaphorical sense, and that is what i deduced. That is what a writer should do.Give the reader's mind a flip flop. Keep writing :)

~Sophy

[Dipanjan Dutta]

yes Sophie...that is the point...i left it free to interpet and you are right on target...no physical walking away or no bodily free fall...

thanks again for a review

[Sophy Freebirds]

Always a pleasure D

[hardeep sabharwal]

The idea of self killing does not suits to my way of thinking as I am a hatdcore optimist, I want to add if someone is different, it does not mean that one should end like this, and also, life is first for the self and other things matters afterwards,
but coming to the piece, its overall a wonderful write in such a precisely written work

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Thanks Hardeep...I am too against self killing and just wnated to point out that it is never a solution to anything...

[Avinash]

Final leap appeared quite epic in this short piece. I am no fan of taking life by own for the same reason that we do not come to the world on our own though. But a great piece of writing. Waiting for extended novel from you someday.

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Thanks for the review Avinash...neither I am a supporter of self killing...and about the novel, well someday definitely... :)

[Pax]

this piece, somehow a confessional shout-out journal type. I like it... because I have lots of this before, the time I was bullied or the joke of the town for being me. Sometimes I would like to be invisible to somewhere I felt like I belong... its hard when your personality sometimes is easily notice-able. some people crave attension, some don't, me - i just like to be close to those people who likes just the way i am... who understand us no matter what our fault are...

The problems sometimes is us - we are too judgemental upon ourselves and others, so acceptance is far off the corners beyond our reach. with all that, being different is cool, if some might forget you, definitely there will be someone in that group will remember you for being you, the different you... if not there will always be someone or some group of people would like the different you... i guess it doesn't matter who can't accept us as long as you accept yourself as the you is different from the others, remember we are all unique in our ways...

very short piece, but it speaks what you felt...
very expressive!

[Dipanjan Dutta]

That is exactly what I meant...glad that the piece reflected as the way I wanted it to be...and indeed we are judgmental often than needed...I somehow feel there is no point being accepted everywhere by everyone...that is the beauty of our life...if I am loved by all, remembered by all and accepted by all, there is a part of life that gets missed out - being different, being the way I am...

Thanks for your detailed review friend.

[Pax]

Been there, so I understand. You are very welcome, my friend :)

[Sreenath]

the emotion here is kindled.... being different is cool.. i personally feel human doesn't understands until he experiences it for example . you are writer if you get to know a famous writer it would be cool to you.
so you get care from those who share common qualities... i sometimes feel expecting care and warmth in this world is pointless right? we all are different....very intriguing piece...:) peace

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Yeah, that was my point. Everyone loves to get attention and being accepted. But, in case there isn't an acceptence from the people around, we stop by to blame them.Seldom we realize that it may be I who is the one different and so is not accepted. Does it really matter if we are not accepted by every people we meet in our life?

Thanks for your review Sree.