Stubborn

Let us realize our strong point

The little bird leaped on its short legs pecking on the ground in search of food. In a while or two, it will spread its wings and sail nearby. There could be more food. The wings, pampered at the ends with a tinge of black, are a beauty. And then it will glide away miles across. If only we had been birds, we would think and nod.

Life without the drift of time, or even less the concept, seems satisfying. The crawl as it does, for long enough a time to cross the simplest path, let go the path or its simplicity, even the next step, so slow and reluctant, unburdened. If only we had been the sloth, the thought would give us another opportunity to nod.

And this "if only" are immense and number less for there are much certainty of what we see throughout the day, which unwillingly or soothingly, whatever it is but as per expectation lulls into the evening. Then we do not see things, we do not think "if only" and we do not nod. For it is then that we, the dwellers of a land, blank and empty as our mind, we, a bunch of folks free and wild, shiver in cold; it is then that we burn in the sun and bathe in the rain; for it is then and now and forever that we live with the trees, as the trees, naked yet firm and deeply rooted to one place.

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Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

Its a philsophical piece..well conceived ideas but not so greatly penned.. you have a tendency of expressing all your ideas at a time. Due to which you write immensely long disjointed sentences . It happens but you can get over it by breaking the complex sentences. Also i guess there is a typo here numberless is a single word. No space in between. Nice thought though it needs a bit of editing.

~Sophy

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Thanks Sophie...yeah, that is a typo definitely...and about the editing surely I will have a look...however my idea here was just to portray the attitude of us to long for what others have...rather than satisfied with what we have...and for that I used two meaphors - the bird and the sloth..will check if this can be re-written more precisely...

Thanks again for criticizing in details..this helps a lot

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Thanks Sophie...yeah, that is a typo definitely...and about the editing surely I will have a look...however my idea here was just to portray the attitude of us to long for what others have...rather than satisfied with what we have...and for that I used two meaphors - the bird and the sloth..will check if this can be re-written more precisely...

Thanks again for criticizing in details..this helps a lot

[Sophy Freebirds]

Its good you took it positively. I really liked the depth of this writing so i didnt wanna go there. You know about it well. So i went to highlight how you can break the sentences to be more clear and precise. Was definitely a pleasure :)