Isolation

Wrote this in ISS.. lol

Such a big room yet it feels so empty

Everyone in here punishedwanting to leave quikly

Unable to move a muscle without everyone hearing

Looking off in the distance hoping to see a clearing

 

I doze off and dream of leaving this place

This feeling is catching up like a cat and mouse chase

With no track of time I begin to worry

Fear fills my eyes,everything becomes blurry

 

Unable to move speak a word or a punisment

Hours pass and I wonder where the time went

Sitting with my back to the other convits

I see what I am, the last peice finally fits

 

I'm a convict locked up in a cell of despair

I scream for help but everyone ignores me without a care

The heartless b******s that out me in here are laughing in my face

I want them them dead so I can be free from this place

 

As I leave this room I can see

I can see I don't deserve to be free

Turning around and walking back into the room

I belong here with the convicts, suffering my doom

 

Dustin Davis: December 15, 2009

Reviews

[Ladysue]

This had a lot of depth. It flowed well and I like the analogy..

[Kayla]

I thought this was a very good poem!! It basically explains the how lonely a convict would feel. U did a very good job at describing that!!

[Chelsea.]

Well, very good poem, but kind of worries me a bit.
To me, this is saying you view yourself as a convict who deserves to be punished?
Hm,
nice word choice though.
I can relate to the feeling of isolation.

[Tate Morgan]

Great depth of thought You should read the novel Les Miserables It is a similar tale of woe from the 1800s and an uplifting education on humanity
Good work
Tate