On that Night I Learnt How Grasping Was The Diamond Spell

An admiration

• We stood gazing high

  staring into the celestial

  when church bells were nigh

  hearing to the pedestrian

  
  

  the beauty of the twinkling stars

  did not make me hush

  the puny of the passing cars

  did now make me rush

  
  

  ceaseless went my chattering mouth

  but your gape was fixed in its sight

  endless watch of the mastering skies

  shut, my eyes too lifted to the night

• Quietude of the yard entwine

  smell of jasmine reached my nose

  Quick it changed my past opine

  soon it fasten to breach my pose

  
  

  air grew thick and the curtains untied fell

  I think I slept on the floor

  but he carried me in .. then there was smile when he closed the door

  on that eventide, I first learnt how grasping was the diamond spell

Author's Note

any suggestions for improvement?

Reviews

[Imelda Blackheart]

Another great write from you! I really enjoyed how you, like quinfinn said, made the words come alive and made a visual masterpiece. Still can't wait for more!

[Dinali Sathma]

Thank You

[quinfinn]

in the third stanza, change eye to eyes....fourth stanza, fasten should be fastened...fifth stanza/first line, think is supposed to be thick and ...learnt should properly be learned, but i prefer learnt! this poem is amazing! i think it is a visual masterpiece and desrves a place in my favorites. well done, poet!

[Dinali Sathma]

Thank you a lot. I'll make a note to change all that.