Oh Darling, Tell Me

Oh darling, tell me, how do you see me?

As a bird in the sky, wild and free?

Or shy, and timid, a bit mousey?

 

Oh darling, tell me, are we meant to be?

Your hands fit in mine,

So prim and neat.

 

Oh darling, tell me, why do you scream?

Are you not happy, joy through the seams?

Are you upset with me? Or at everything?

 

Oh darling, tell me, why do you cry?

I hate to see those tears fall from your eyes.

You tell me its nothing, I know that you lie,

Why won’t you tell me what’s gone awry?

 

Oh darling, tell me, why do you do this?

Saddened my heart is, nostalgic for your kiss.

I do not wish to ever again, see you quite like this.

 

Oh darling, tell me, do you love me so?

I wished to ask, but you told me to go.

And when I returned, lo and behold,

You were lying faint, blue and cold.

 

Oh darling, tell me, why did you die?

You ended your life, and the ‘you and I’.

I will always remember you, when I cry.

Oh darling, tell me, was this what you felt?

As if the worst card in the deck, to you, was dealt?

I wish only you’d told me, if only, if only.

Oh darling, you should’ve told me.

Author's Note

I don't really have much to say about this one... Critiques and reviews are welcome.

Reviews

[Michael X]

the is the ode to all apologies, a metaphorical classic, the words invent
a sense of passionate melody that takes hold of the reader, to lust
for an answer that will never come, you leave the indivisual meaning
open to specific interpretation, and that is the brilliance, loved this ^_^

[The XYZ Writer]

This is a very interesting piece. I wasn't expecting the ending. The way you made everything rhyme was pretty good, although you may have missed one or two places (but I do that all the time.) :P

Clap on the back for a nice piece. :)

~Sumayya

[Mackenzie Brooke]

Very sweet and endearing good write!

[Lydia]

I really enjoyed this. You've done a wonderful job here.

[Kimberleigh]

Such a melancholic ending, but so beautifully written. I love it. :)

[Pikachu]

Oh my. Lovely write. This way you used your words, it's just lovely!

[Sasha]

Its very dark in a way and poweful. I like it. :D