Perefection

This is a change in style for me considering usually sexual experiences in my writing are summed up in several lines, this however is entirely dedicated to one so tell me what you think.

Her vigor unbridled and unbound,
the likes of love and lust exchanged and merged.
Seamless and apparent at once.
Moment everlasting and brief.
Inexplicable expression propagate her eyes,
of what look to be fear, excitement and joy.
Her chest rising and falling unsteadily
and uncontrollably in a beautifully irregular pattern.
Her teeth raking against her bottom lip.
Reserves of passion released within her.
Back arching and her hands clenching the sheets violently.
Attempting to utter vocalization but repeatedly failing
as her vocal chords practically paralyze.
She Gasps.                
Barely able to utter a shaken moan through her teeth.    
Tears resulting from pleasure in the corners
of her tightly shut eyes.
Toes painfully clenched .
Legs stricken with stiffness clenching against my sides.
Her hand rises to clench what she can of the back of my head.
Her breath is released in a pattering manor,
She remains shaking still breathing erratically.
And her breath ceasing to calm for several minutes.
Her hands still firmly clenched into the sheets.
Her breath calms and her heart slows as she speaks softly,
whisper lightly under her breath.
Voice shaken and unsteady.

“...Perfect...”

Author's Note

Well its new for me. so tell me what you think

Reviews

[Astrid Hamilton]

WOWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What is the key when writing erotica?
To satisfy the sensual and sexual senses and being able to make a reader feel that same sort of ecstacy,
without using harsh imagery too loose in imagination.
This is subtle, yet revealing, and written in a very mature fashion; not from the content which is not offensive in its explicit nature, but from the way the two lovers engage, and the tenderness of the tell-all.
I can "feel" this; my heart beat more rapidly, and my flower you can see began to be,...
you have created excitement from a single poem, written in a breath so effortlessly
in a story form, without even realizing.
especially the line,
She Gasps.
Volumous.
Going on, and on, until the end, just from those two words.
Literally then, the climax of the story.
=)

And, of course,
"perfect" ly written.