TELL ME

monsoon is here, again.

I'm, still, loving you with the heart you broke.
With pieces stitched together i, still, keep you in it.
Tell me, how much i need to walk?
Tell me, If this rain remind you of me?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Once again, a poem with questioning . . . even tho you don't offer any answers, I can still see what's important to this narrator . . . he wants to get the lady back in his life, it seems. I would omit all the commas in the first two lines. In the last two lines, the commas are useful. I find myself wishing a poem like this was a little longer. I think there's more you could say, to describe these feelings of missing someone!??!?! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Digvijay Singh]

Thank you Margie. This is what i want a review to be like. Teaches a thing or two. And these are thoughts actually.. so they come in lines.. that's the reason for it being just in 4 lines.. Thanks❤️

[barleygirl]

When I first started writing poetry about ten years ago, my poems were short. I thought I said what I had to say at the time. But then as I wrote more & more, I learned to let go & dig deeper & keep going, even after I thought I had said what I had to say. It can be amazing what else is in there! But you can't force it, so just do what you do, at the length that it feels right for now.

[Digvijay Singh]

I totally agree. I don't want to force myself for just few more lines and when i do i feel like I'm cheating or ruining the original lines.. so.. maybe with time i would be able to do the same. But.. for now.. this is it..

[Jade]

very touching write here, This is wonderful

[Digvijay Singh]

Thank you Jade.❤️