United States

United States, home of the free,

Promising future? Important to me.

Too many people take it's liberty,

Not caring about harsh reality.

 

Unfortunate people, under the Eagle's wings,

Leave thier homes and thier old kings.

Bringing with them scars that do sting,

But knowing they can now have everything.

To the United States, freedom's set at naught,

Except for a few, who really give it thought.

Hard to believe the people who sought

the freedom here that is so leisurely taught.

There are so many liberties in this land;

There are some liberties that I cannot stand.

Pros and cons always go hand in hand,

But it's where I've lived, it's all I understand.

United States, home of the "free",

Peaceful future? Unsure to me.

Too many people talk about liberty,

Thought it is not very easy to be able to see.

United States, encouraging nations worldwide,

Does its best to get on everyone's good side.

So that one day that country may provide,

And may be able to "peacefully coincide".

If this United States could only learn

To give and help everyone in return.

It only cares about what they earn,

And helping others is none of their concern.

United States, mostly consumers, rely on trade,

Historians know this and are very afraid.

Don't give what they want and they'll start to invade,

They take what they want so long as they're paid.

United States, home of the un-free,

Revolutionary future? Possible, I see.

Too many come here joyfully,

Until they learn there is no liberty.

One day, I hope that this gets changed,

Have this knotty government rearranged.

Revolution is needed, but the cons will be exchanged,

No more rulers to keep bad things unchanged.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is okay, as long as its constructive.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The USA need new direction. Can't save the world when your country is 16 trillion in debt. Can't fight war on all continents costing the USA 1.2 trillion dollars. Need to invest in the kids and the people. Education and jobs. I had the strong statements in your poem. Change will come. I hope peacefully. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[CrimsonBlaze]

????I swear I reviewed this before .3.
I like how you criticzise (I don't think I spelled that right XD) our country on what we do wrong whether it seems minor/major to people or not. And what you pointed out was true. You also made the poem flow very well, which I have to say, to me, I always need a rhyming dictionary by my side to get through. Hopefully the US will heed these words cuz they're true. We might've done a few major things, but we need to try to do more. (Ex. Most stuff is made from China/Japan. Where'd the US go?) Anyways, strong poem XD

[Ellen Brook]

Seems like you're a patriotic citizen! Nice work!

[Marie]

Good poem. You don't tear down your country but want it to liveup to its origins. I don't know what Rubishiibu is; maybe it has revelance to this poem.

[Popble]

And this is why we have Rubishiibu. Excellent poem good sir, keep it up