Cyclone

Shards of glass pass by,

Like lightening striking into eyes,

Bloody words and bloody minds

Clashing, dancing, breaking, fine.

 

Silence again, the song has stopped.

Frames frozen, Silhouettes unmoving,

But not for long, the storm is here.

Here we go the winds are raging.

 

Stop, fight, Regret, Repeat.

Never-ending the cycle spins on.

A vicious cyclone, turbulent currents

Take their toll on broken souls.

 

No admittance, its just natural

No self control, its just the seasons

Rapidly changing but where is the door?

There must be peace, must be something more.

 

Not this broken planet spiralling

Into the depths of darkness, Black hole consuming.

Pause the collision, make right the wrongs.

Smash this loud stereo, permanently silence this song.

 

Reviews

[Lavi]

Okay, wow, just damn. This piece us awesome. The first stanza, the very first four lines had me hooked like a dehydrated person looking for water. I don't really give cyclones much thought. I usually think of malestroms, whirpools, tsunamis, hurricanes, and what-not but reading this more or less opened my eyes to the other metaphorical destructive - constant - powers out in the world.

I love the visuals you portray in this. To picture the unmoving flames, the unmoving shadow in the room. It makes me wonder if the speaker is the silhouette or if it's like something in a dream.

I especially love these two lines:

Clashing, dancing, breaking, fine.
&
Stop, fight, Regret, Repeat.

I like how this is kind of like a song, or something you kind of just step into mid-beat. I don't think I've read anything like this before, or at least in a while, and it's as refreshing as it is innovating for my writing muse.

So thank you and please never stop writing. This is like liquid music through my veins.

Just, the comparison between our lives and the constant motions of the natural world around us. It opens our eyes just a little wider and reminds us that this internal warfare isn't fleeting - it's there with us, every step of the way.

[Dianne S Penfold]

Your comment made me tear up. :') Thank you so much for your kindness.

[Jade]

WOW! Love that last stanza, really powerful and deep. Very nicely written and expressed

[emipoemi]

I have no words......my voice is in my awe!!

This is poetry in motion! Well done!

[Crowley]

A swirling condemnation and a very sharp point. This had more truths than a 12 step meeting. It makes me feel like time is running out. Great write!!

[Dianne S Penfold]

Thank you. I also feel like we have less time on this planet

[Arya]

One day we will face the consequences for our crimes against nature. Your poem is a warning, a glimpse into the future. Good write.Has a vision and a point.

[W R Stowe]

I believe in line 2 you meant into the eyes,you are almost writing about the end of this world come judgement day, because this planet is definitely broken

[Dianne S Penfold]

I meant eyes, as I wrote it there. And yes, this poem can be interpreted as a nature, destructive one but I meant it as more of an internal conflict.

[W R Stowe]

Since you explained it as an internal conflict I understand your choice of wording sorry

[Dianne S Penfold]

Don't apologize please. I appreciate your comment and its interesting to see how others interpret my poems.