Coming Of Spring

Coming Of Spring

A Poem by Diane Lockard
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Thoughts as I look out at the countryside....

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"Wisps of clouds, grab the tops of the snow covered mountains
Grays, white, and a shallow band of blue dominate the sky.            
Stark trees, waiting for spring; new life appears.
Wooly lambs, soon, gamboling in the fresh-smelling grass.

© 2016 Diane Lockard


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Ah the sound feel and smell of spring always makes me happy

Posted 11 Years Ago


The transition of one season to the next always sets me pondering life, marveling at nature's splendor, and even going inside myself in search of truth. A very nice poem, Diane.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane Lockard

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I travel back and forth to Central Utah, and have gained inspiration for several of my po.. read more
Four lines and double impact. Theme's great and i can see some views of spring now, because it's now a days too warm and you made my night by this piece.
lively write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane Lockard

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughtful words, and stopping by....
Diane
To me line 3 has a weakness... "new life appears," those words feel unjoined to the stark trees. A case of I understand (I think) what your thought was expressing, it's just the shorthand symbols left out a 'squiggle'.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane Lockard

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I see what you mean; they are not connected, so it needs ; - correct?
I appreciate .. read more
Chris

11 Years Ago

I liked your 'vision' and look forward to others
Lovely Diane and hope you win the contest...pretty images...Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane Lockard

11 Years Ago

Rose, Thank you, I found it today, and this is the cut off, plus I posted two stories on Fan Story. .. read more
You use some good imagery in this, but I think you ought to have expanded a little more. At present this is all a little nebulous and meaningless.

Posted 11 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Diane Lockard

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the comment, it is for a contest for imagery in 6 lines or less....

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Added on May 21, 2013
Last Updated on May 21, 2016
Tags: Nature, Spring, Inspiration

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Diane Lockard
Diane Lockard

Moroni, UT



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Thank you, friends, for exchanging stories and poems, plus reviewing my writing. Memories of growing up in Montana - My Mother's Hands, On the Road Again about family reunions, Discover Life's Treasur.. more..

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