Back to the drawing board

Inspired by Earthships (self sufficient housing)

BACK TO THE DRAWING BOARD

Plans erased, redrawn in pen
Shattered dreams are born again.
Solar powered new creations
New ideas to fuel whole nations.

Wind in sails keeps her blowing
In cyberspace  plans keep growing
Earthships sail in deserts bloom
Environmental living room.

Must protect our natural resources
Or Mother Nature wil divorce us.
Plans are needed for our rebirth
We are the midwives of this earth.

D.Hinson

Reviews

[T. F. Rice]

Dianah,
I want to let you know that the quote preceding your poem does not appear while I am reading contest submissions. Consider typing it in as an epigraph instead, if appropriate (such as in this case, a few words, and really adds to the poem)...

For example, you could type your "Inspired by Earthships, a form of self-sufficient housing" in italics, inserted just below your title, and that would be totally appropriate from a poetic form standpoint. This would allow your quote to add to the meaning of the piece of writing, and be viewed in any window of W.C.

Also author name and such do not appear for judging, which is great so results are completely blind...except if name is manually typed in like you did...but it doesnt matter because I dont know you so it is still blind judging!

:-) Just FYI, I thought you might want to know this! Some poets use epigraphs way too much, comes across as too telling, or as they can't get the poem's point across without the preceding quote, BUT HERE AND THERE an epigraph is really appropriate!

When I read your poem, to be truthful, I did not know what is an Earthship, but I hope that didnt influence me in any way. I think I understood the rest of it! And you did get an HM, and lots of submissions did not, so thanks for participating!! Write on!
T. F. Rice