Transformation

Surreal poem about Spring, spirituality and new beginings

TRANSFORMATION

 

In the sweet shop of distraction

Minds wander through neglect

Neurons fired but lost in action

Wires defunct, systems wrecked.

 

She lifts up the crescent moon

Filled with dazzling inspiration

Wakes the serpents up too soon

Ripening time for transformation.

 

Deceitful carpets of white flowers

Hide the thorns that cut her feet

Blood red blossom will devour

Hearts that dance to a new beat.

 

No time to play on mood swings

Wrapped in multitudes of sins

Mirrored woman reflects her soul

As the fair ground ride begins.

 

© D. Hinson

 

Author's Note

Image~ a sketch of mine coloured in photoshop.

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

Hmmm.. there was something about that , that somewhat let me down and i dont kno why because the words where perfectly chosen , the lines flowed but still my mind sits un happy somewhere and i cant quite pin point where.
A nice piece all the saem im only sorry i cannot fully read thru my own choice of feeling.. a good read at any cost

[Surrealstorm]

I think the imagery is very good and the rhyme scheme makes it a smooth read. Great Write!

[Georgia Gypsy]

Very good, had my attention from the begining to the end. The imagry is very well thought out and described in a way that i see exactly what you are telling about,. Great work!

[Jason]

Beautiful work of art. Flows like a river and sings like a bird. Deep and full of emotion. I love it!

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Nicely written poem, I enjoyed reading it very much, thanks for posting. Good, good.

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This is incrediably written, amazing job!

[Pepel]

Beautiful

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

I am at a loss for words....well, maybe I have a few: great flow, imagery and word play.

Cheers!
GM

[Sarah]

WOW. That was AMAZING. I loved it, from the very first line until the very end. Such powerful imagery & language.... I loved the vivid details you used and the pictures you painted with your words. AHH I'm afraid there's no way to express how much I enjoyed this poem. Just know that I did! XD Favorited fo sho.

[Sasavet]

This is great. Sometimes rhyming sounds like kindergarten poems (at least mine do :P) but this worked really well. I loved the flowery, spring-like style to this.

Good jobb