iPhone Notes #2

iPhone Notes #2

A Poem by Ellen Randall
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Random thoughts and ideas written into my iPhone notes.

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You were swinging the modern look,
I was the art student straight outta the book,
You combed your hair back,
And I dyed mine lilac.
Two different worlds that met at the lips,
All because you loved my swaying hips.

© 2014 Ellen Randall


Author's Note

Ellen Randall
A work in progress

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This poem has an alluring cadence manifested both in its content and form. Its narrative flow left me wondering about the events to follow. Although you indicate it is a work in progress, the poem seems to work very well as a standalone piece.

- John

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Randall

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much John!! This is very encouraging.
I always worry my stuff isn't quiet complet.. read more
angel augustine

10 Years Ago

thats so encouraging...and helpful...



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"Art student straight outta the book?" Sounds good. I love the line. Nice imagery. You`ve expressed a glimpse of your heart through this write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I write notes in my iPhone because I'm always on the go... I truly enjoyed the couplets...very modern...I love the energy your poem brings.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Randall

10 Years Ago

Thank you Everett! Your comments are very greatly appreciated
Everett DeValle

10 Years Ago

You are very welcome, Ellen...Actually, Thank you for sharing...welcome to the WC.
Sometimes very few words means you have to be mindful as what you want to represent. And this got to me as sexy as free a little irresponsible and up tp have a good time. Morern look / vs Art student with a tinge of prple in there and the inference that she is curvy and attractive.

Time to swap numbers then or get a room?

Thankyou

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ellen Randall

10 Years Ago

Haha actually its about my boyfriend and I and I like to thing our relationship is very fun and free.. read more
Rene Salinas

10 Years Ago

Ha! All sorted then
This poem has an alluring cadence manifested both in its content and form. Its narrative flow left me wondering about the events to follow. Although you indicate it is a work in progress, the poem seems to work very well as a standalone piece.

- John

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ellen Randall

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much John!! This is very encouraging.
I always worry my stuff isn't quiet complet.. read more
angel augustine

10 Years Ago

thats so encouraging...and helpful...

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Added on July 19, 2014
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Ellen Randall
Ellen Randall

Kerala, Kerala, India



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