Socks in the water

Added some more lyrics i wrote i am putting together how she changed due to peer pressure and sold her self to a false perfection.but i see thru it all

crumbled into apathy and animosity

all i know which you know
vivid dreams curiosity
socks in the water
praise the ghost in the communities
her eyes her fire the jubilees

can you conquer on the chariot

can i walk aside blow bubbles in the paradox
of you're eyes

so close in now into the burial
notice the waves of a pedestrian
what magic you chant
mist crawl the clique implant


its suicide when the doors slide

who lives on the dungeon floor

mirror i cant see you're eyes

lapsing time loading slow when demons celebrate on your side

minds elevator the prison tutorial guide


i poked a hole into the curtains of youre solitary

hold the rocks back when you approach

don't stare don't criticize the queen. the robe with rodents and roaches

bathtub of peaches hanging hands cant reach

Reviews

[Susan 🦋]

Though I appreciate the work ... I am having a difficult time understanding your meaning. I don't even know where to begin. Wondering if there is a way to give some "info" in regards to your theme?? Maybe some author notes?? Just an idea. Respectfully, Susan.

[Diabolicalbeard]

Thanks for the feedback regarding my lyrics it's about someone who changes who they are just to fit and ego etc i am trying figure what all went wrong in the mist of things

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for the explanation. You have quite a unique style. My only suugestion would be to taper your thoughts with your readers. Poetry should evoke emotions. Leave the reader pondering thoughts or feelings. If poetry becomes too complex in expression, what is the point? The challenge is to take your poetic abilities and sytle and make the reader understand the message. Again, just a suugestion. Respectfully, Susan.