Rape

Its about how a girl after being a victim to Rape feels like. P.S-I've just written it out.I'm not one o them.

There was pain in her soul,
There was fear in her mind,
There were drops in her eyes,
And those cheeks which were waiting to smile,
Her heart was beating fast,
But her lips didn't apart,
There was fire burning inside,
Yet she was shivering out,
She was scared,
Scared to say that,
That she was RAPED.

Author's Note

Ignore some grammatical error. If there are some.

Reviews

[Simran Kewlani]

"There were drops welled up in her eyes,
And on her rosy cheeks which were waiting to smile,
Her heart beating fast,
But her lips didn't part,
There was a burning inside her,
Yet she was shivering on the outside,
She was scared, she was afraid,
Afraid of what?
She was afraid to accept the fact that she was raped."

Just a thought. Check the corrections. I like the poem but as Stonz said, it was too deliberate. There should have been hints about the rape victim. But it's okay since this is your first poem.
And yeah, welcome to the site. :)

[Dhruvi Toshniwal]

ThankYou. I know I am not good at it.But hope to improve.

[Dhruvi Toshniwal]

You'll help me Okay?

[Simran Kewlani]

Ofcourse. :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Well U Explained the mentality very well here. Write has strong feel to it.

[Stonz P.]

'her lips didn't part' is correct; not apart.

I like the beginning but the ending was too deliberate for me. Maybe, it should have been hinted at. As I said others might agree with it but I feel something better could have been written.

And since this is your first upload, welcome to the site.

[Dhruvi Toshniwal]

Thanks.As you know its my first writing so mistakes obviously have to come up. and I hope to improve and I know I will with help of people like you:)