Who can relate

My first poem

I'm just a kid
I'll own it
Every moment
I'll set the standard how to live
No hesitation
The youth could use some inspiration
The devils knockin at your door
Share your wealth with the poor
Not everyone had the chance you did
Mediocre stock broker
How do you have so much to give
Millionaire actor
Not a community factor
Athletes have talent
I don't doubt it
Its all the same
So much money just a game
That's the USA
Our veterans struggle every day
Hard workers keeping this country alive
Go unnoticed
Fortune denied
Cause no ones focused
Prioritize
Start with the kids
Without guidance
Give the orphans a place to live
I will not be silenced
Welfare system is a joke
I don't pay taxes so you can smoke
Material world I reject it
Superior how your pathetic
So much potential
This is essential
Let it be simple
Forget your greed and
Give away what you don't need
These problems I know you see it
Revolution let me lead it?

Reviews

[Dgrace20]

Thanks! .

[Matching Socks]

That's a pretty awesome debut...
Great flow, subtle rhymes, high impact message.
Nice job.