My Inner Fire

 

Dancing flames upon my heart,

Quicken, as we grow apart.

The fire grows as days go by

Like scorching sun in mid July

 

Until it starts to drip and melt.

 

 

My gasping breath leaks gusts of smoke,

Causing me to tear and choke.

And then you left, without goodbye

I heard my heart sear and fry

 

In the pit of my aching stomach.

 

I hate you and your pointless words.

They’ve only left a scar.

I fell head first, began to stumble,

My heart black, begins to crumble

 

I hope you burn in hell.

Reviews

[darkgurl]

"I hate you and your pointless words.
They've only left a scar.
I fell head first, began to stumble,
My heart black, begins to crumble"

Such emotion filled words with hatered, can't touch someone whose heart and soul has been ripped in two, at least this us what i got from this write, This is a well written write here, I do like your talent...Kim

[No]

hey thanks =] i was debating over wether or not it was appropriate for a creative writing class...

[Rachel DeHart]

I agree with nightmask, your rhyme scheme is wonderful.
The passion showed is intense and catching. Kind of like a building force.
Amazing poem.

[nightmask]

oooh firey i like :) very well put, excellent rhyme scheme