and the sting swirls sweet-

 

 

 

the other side that's yet to be seen
the side where spiral weaves serene

the side that's seen to be left unseen
the more that is there, just in-between

in-between the words that utter
that spit- that spout- that spew- that sputter-

sputter to utter that endless something
that leaves the mark before the sting

and the sting swirls sweet and straight to source
runs the rush of a different course

and the dreams dream the dreams, that dream to stargaze
but reality holds the stars that set the dreams ablaze

and the sting swirls sweet, more captivating
makes the worth value creating

creating the lines never traced again
the never traced before, the never traced even then

the never traced time, that never traced the when
the never ever traced, will never trace again

twist my words around your tongue
feel the sting that you have stung

that poison sweet remnant remains
ran your blood straight through your veins

ran mine through and the sting swirls sweet
and yet the match has made its meet

meeting where the stars conspire
collide, burning brighter fire

until then, the sting swirls sweet
that poison sweet you can't excrete

a reminder, spiral weaves serene
much that's left, my dear... unseen-

Reviews

[Michael X]

Nicely written Melody, I mean its captivating flow has a way of carrying the reader
in the concept, The ending is intriguing, all togther a pleasure to read,
had a fun, whimsical, lighthearted beat, a tristy twist of word crafting.

This is a very good use of talent here.

Great choice of words, wonderful form, rhythm, and rhyme.

Well imparted message and use of imagery.

This is a very good piece

[J. James Reider]

nice use of assonance... mixed with a little alliteration... beautifully crafted and carefully written... this work danced with my mind... Very excellent job my dear!

[THE BLACK SEAL]

i think you did quite nicely with this. it has a nice rhyme it flows nice and it ha some nie images which are unique that spill off of the page

[Deborah Shepard]

talented love the words


meeting where the stars conspire, my fav words

you etched beauty