A Forgiving Mother

A Forgiving Mother

A Poem by Devanshi
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A mother's love is the most forgiving and lasting one.

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Her hands hold mine,

For a noticeable chunk of time.

The warmth unable to be released,

Of her soft hands that would never cease.


I spill out the words,

Out of excitement like flying birds,

I never meant to say them,

You didn’t want to hear them.


How was I unable to realize,

That they would hurt your soft heart?

How did it never occur to me,

That holding in words,

Was part of a growing me?


I want you to be mine,

Forever until the love shines.

A mother can never be replaced,

My words will henceforth,

Never be misplaced.


You came back.

If I were you, I would never have.

You are a mother true to your soul,

Forgiving as you are,

Your words correct my soul.


Never shall I take advantage,

Of your forgiving self.

I will change into a better being,

Like the protagonists on that book shelf.


Her hands hold mine once again,

Her face beaming with pride,

To see her girl becoming like her,

To see the love we are beginning to regain.


I shall never push again,

That love towards the very edge,

Because I cannot bear to see twice,

You going far away, from my eyes.

© 2016 Devanshi


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Devanshi
Hi! I would love to hear your reviews on this poem. Please tell me what I can improve on, anything else is welcome!

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This is awesome, very nicely written as well

Posted 4 Years Ago


It is so cute as the writer is cute ...
Cute words, perfectly arranged, sounds lovely
I don't think, you need to change anything in this master piece :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is a very moving poem, very tender and loving. If we learn and grown and do better, that is a true sign of love and that mother did well with her child. Excellent write!!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Thank you for you kind words! Glad you liked it!!
Tina Kline

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Well Devanshi my eyes were flooded with tears..I hallucinated my own mother.well what you wrote is a FACT.We sometimes trouble them so much that they get angry with us ...it really hurts then but after some time your moma's back...she forgets and forgives ...she never plots a revenge

Posted 7 Years Ago


Swati Nayak

7 Years Ago

you tugged my heart's string sister
Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind and inspiring words. 😊
I love this so much. So beautifly written. I can feel what you feel. really

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Thanks for your review!
I absolutely love your poems! I don't read much poems so I can't really say, but if I had to guess, then I think this poem could pass of as a professionally written poem. Amazing work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Oh, really? Thank you!! That's really motivating!!
(I am flattered) No I am not, just kidding.. read more
It is indeed a beautiful write as other writers have reviewed. The relationship of mother and child, as a matter of fact, parents to a child is something that never changes, the other way round may change. Good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!
A child when born and forever has a special relationship with his mother. I really like this piece and it has some special moments that one can relate to his/her own Mother.

Mother's contribution in the life can never be argued and is invaluable!

I had been waiting for you to publish new piece, loved reading!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it!
tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Welcome, my pleasure!
In the 3rd grouping, change the first word heart to hurt. I think that is what you meant to say. A very deeply moving write. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

Oh, yeah! I didn't notice that...I changed it...thanks for pointing it out!
Very sweet and warm poetry dedicated to your mom. she will definitely be happy reading this....
the word hurt has been changed to heart in the third paragraph.... try to edit that........ rest all is very nice!!!!👏👍

Posted 7 Years Ago


Devanshi

7 Years Ago

thanks for the review!! And I also edited the word heart...Though, I didn't have my mother read it y.. read more
Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

My pleasure... and I think u should be fast making her read this one...
Devanshi

7 Years Ago

I just did! It was fun!! Thank you...for telling me to make her read it. :D

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Added on December 2, 2016
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