THE HALLUCINATION

True Friends are a precious gift from God. "A Boy gets lost in a Hallucination, shares his experience and prays for eternal friendship of true friends..."

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ghost writer]

I liked when you said '...is what the soul in this shell cries' because it's true that our bodies are just shells, vessels they're not who we are, I wouldn't even say they're what we are, because the soul lasts forever, but the body never will.
When you were talking about the relative it would be 'a' not 'an'
I liked this it was sad that the friend wasn't real. I like that idea though.

[Lacey Sue]

This is phenomenal work!!! I mean as I was reading it I felt the waterworks because I gotta say after what happened a few months ago to me I started hallucinating and I can't sleep at night because I always feel like someone is standing above me which makes me more scared, to be honest so I'm glad people can write things for others to read that they can connect to

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so very much Hazel! Though I have never experienced any hallucination, I just wrote this one, for a friend I did never befriend..

[Lacey Sue]

That's very good you seem like a loyal friend

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much.

[Lacey Sue]

Anytime being honest

[SoozProtege]

Thanks for sharing, a great write, I think it could use a little editing/condensing in some places to create a neuter flow. But good work here

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks a lot!

[Carina Baumert]

Such a powerful poem with a strong emotional message. I've felt that way sometimes after making a friend (either brand new or someone who didn't even speak to me in real life) during a dream and in the morning they were gone. Very easy to relate to writing. Keep it up!

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much for your sincere review! I too sometimes feel like losing a friend I did never befriend...

[alanwgraham]

Well done Devansh. You have done a great poetic job portraying the loss of a friend and how we pine for them. However we can keep them in our heart and move on.
Take care.
Alan

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much! And yes we should always keep true friends in our heart as everyone doesn't have true friends :) only the luckiest do

[light and ashes]

This hit me really hard...I remember being like this. Then I found my tribe. I remember how happy I was when I found them. Now no matter what happens...they will always have a very special place in my heart.. even if we completely grow apart, great poem.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks for your review Allie!
Well, will you please tell me what tribe were you talking about?

[light and ashes]

Not an actual tribe...just an expression more of how I felt about them.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Now I understand. Thank you for telling me :)

[light and ashes]

You're welcome :)

[Anushka joshi]

great writing styles !! Dev .. I just felt your lines in my heart
great job !!

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much Anushka!

[Kat]

I haven't read anything as true or as moving as this in a while. Amazing job, its beautifuly written and sounds heavily inspired and full of emotion.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thank you so much Kat!

[Robert Trakofler]

I liked this one Devansh and that's the nice kind of hallucination and a nice positive message in the end:)

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

Thanks a lot for your review!

[John the Baptist]

There is such a phenomenon known as after death experiences. People see, if only for a few moments, loved ones who have passed on. Usually the visions say they are all right and not to worry. These experiences have not been explained as yet.

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

I didn't know about them. Thanks for letting me know, it's quite interesting.

[Shoshana]

This was tear-jerkingly beautiful. I love it, and have never seen anything like it. Unique and pain and beauty mixed to create a perfect concoction, the poem.
It's our soul, that is who we are. We're like a turtle, kinda like you said, a shell. What's on the inside is what matters... us.
This truly is a book of young beautiful wisdom.
-Shoshana