Everyday life is full of people telling you why you can't do things and why you should make your goals more obtainable and "grow up" this is just how I feel about it
I actually like this a lot XD it kind of struck a chord with me, because I have a few people like that in my life who think I'm unrealistic or immature or whatever. This poem sounds like something I'd like to say to them lol.
I loved the structure of the poem; the way you began by shamelessly admitting to still doing "childish" things in the first half of it before showing how they now have become more sophisticated and recognized talents was very effective. The whole tone of the poem is defiant and proud. And beyond all that, arts and crafts and singing and all of thr other childish talents become symbols for whatever things people pursue despite the objections of dismissive elders and other rly serious people. Nice job
I actually like this a lot XD it kind of struck a chord with me, because I have a few people like that in my life who think I'm unrealistic or immature or whatever. This poem sounds like something I'd like to say to them lol.
I loved the structure of the poem; the way you began by shamelessly admitting to still doing "childish" things in the first half of it before showing how they now have become more sophisticated and recognized talents was very effective. The whole tone of the poem is defiant and proud. And beyond all that, arts and crafts and singing and all of thr other childish talents become symbols for whatever things people pursue despite the objections of dismissive elders and other rly serious people. Nice job
I don't feel this really a poem. You're just stating facts and formatting the structure in an unusual way. This is neither evocative nor emotive. This does bring up some interesting points but thats about it.
Great poem. I liked the comparison from then and now and I think it's true. Growing up is just a definition.
The last two lines in particular really caught my attention. - I went from being called a child to being called Talented!
That was fantastic. It's funny because when you do grow up, that child like enthusiasm is greatly encouraged. Anyway, thanks for a great poem, I really enjoyed it ^.^
hmm, short and sweet. nice! :D it shows that you go from doing things as a child, that eventually will help you later in life. great write. Continue writing! :)
A good message here, but I think the poem could use a bit more tweaking. I'm not sure what it's missing, perhaps the message is too obvious, and lengthening the piece might add a feeling of expectancy to the reader, or perhaps more imagery might lend it a mystical quality. I don't know, I might just be an a*s lol Keep it up!
Hey my name is Devon, I'm seventeen years old. I'm an artist/musician/writer/actor and have been writing since I was fourteen. I'm planning on using this website as a place to post my poems, stories, .. more..