Never thought all my critique would deal with the title of a piece. I just want to point out that actuall should be "actual" and comparitavely, "comparatively."
I liked this. I'm a fan of this kind of post-modern/self-aware style of writing.
Now, what would have been really interesting is if the title had been equally as long as the haiku (syllable-wise).
Also, it's "haiku," but I get the feeling you know this by now. Good stuff.
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