lol, love the sarcasm and humor. A few very minor grammar thingies, nothing an edit wouldn't clean up nicely, and this unique piece would attract some attention. good humor is hard to find these days.
This is a crazy story. It lost me sometimes, but then i'd laugh my a*s off the next moment later. When you began to name actal people i was crying laughing. Right when the quote "THIS IS SPARTA" I almost pissed my pants. This is great. 100/100.
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