Sweet Darkness

Sweet Darkness

 

Ah my sweet

You look good

Probably taste even better

Those eyes

Those dark dark eyes

When you look at me

I feel you look through me

Into my deepest core

Reading every flaw

Every scratch

I’m not in mint condition

I hope you don’t mind

You can patch me up if you’d like

But reward me with a taste

Your sweet sweet taste

I’m so tempted

You’re like a forbidden fruit

I shouldn’t

But I must

I’m so tired of resisting

Let me give into you

Get lost in you

Devour you

I want to rape you

With my eyes

Up and down

Constantly

And you can’t escape it

You don’t want to

You’re enjoying the attention

But if you’re enjoying it

Is it rape?

I don’t know

But I do know

I want to taste

Your sweetness

And drown

In your darkness

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey this is good.

[Destinyxi]

Why thank you =P

[Eloha]

Destiny, i'd like to think you really are a savage for tempation, but somehow I'm finding your innocent face proof to the contrary.

I enjoyed this, it made me smile and wonder at the secret yearnings of people we might not actually be aware of.

[Destinyxi]

Looks can be deceiving.

I'm glad you liked this poem, one of my personal favorites :P

[Eloha]

I like reading racy poems! Years of ascetiscm have taken their toll on me :P

[Destinyxi]

Haha, no doubt. I love writing these types of poems too :P They're always fun. And it's nice to shock the readers

[Eloha]

Yes well I admit *blushes*. Tiny teeny bit shocked.

[Destinyxi]

Haha, this isn't even one of my extreme ones. I think my poem Hard Savior is more extreme. :P

[Eloha]

Extreme huh? I don't know what I'd do if I got my hands on an erotic poetess.

[Destinyxi]

Not sure xD but yes, Hard Savior was very direct which made it extreme. Or at least I think it did, I'm not usually direct with those types of poems.

[John Stussy]

You seem to be a master at writing desire and passion haha. It was an enjoyable read, and any guy on the receiving end of such hot want would be lucky. I believe I am off to read more of your work!

[Manos]

I like it

[S. Michael Long]

i like the ideas and thought you put into this.. i enjoyed reading it! keep it up.. -s

[Celestial Witch Child]

Wonderful piece of work.

[Jemma]

Loved this ! great work xx

[Gomer LePoet]

Gosh. a very sensual piece. If he doesn't get it, you may need to take his pulse. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"I want to taste
Your sweetness
And drown
In your darknessI want to taste
Your sweetness"
I like the flow of thoughts and the very good ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

And drown

In your darkness

[GunMetal]

"I’m not in mint condition" - This line rings so viciously with me. Like, have a look, see me. It was very bold of you to use rape as your comparison; It could possibly be seen as being a bit excessive, though I think I understand what you were trying to do. With your wanting to violate him with your eyes, and him wanting you to violate him, it's like how two negative numbers cancel each other out to make a positive sum (sorry for mathing :P). It ceases to be violation and becomes a sort of foreplay. Overall a good write.