But Alone

But Alone

A Poem by Destinyxi

But Alone

 

You look

But you don’t see

You hear

But you don’t listen

You know

But you don’t understand

You touch

But you don’t feel

You eat

But you don’t taste

You speak

But you don’t say

You walk

But you don’t move

You smile

But there is no laughter

You cry

But there are no tears

You speak

Without words

You look

Without fear

You write

But you write nothing

You love

But you love no one

You lie

But you lie quietly

You scream

But your screams are muted

You drive

But you drive away

You fall

And you fall hard

You’re cold

With nothing to warm you

Stand tall

But stand alone

Forever alone

© 2012 Destinyxi


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mabe it is like some one ,, a sun that gives no warmth ,, alight that does not drive away the gloom ,, rain that does not soak

Posted 12 Years Ago


nicely written.. this could so easily be compared to a failed father figure.. (in my case) but im sure that it is something much deeper than that.. you express your feelings with direct and unassuming purpose.. its clear and well written.. Very Nice! -s

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I like the use of repetition a lot yet the lines about driving and writing felt more neutral than a sign of being alone the way they were phrased.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Kes
Wowee! That's a killer poem.
It's fantastic from beginning to end. :)
Great work!
K

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well done! well penned and a great read! The picture and title compliment your words very well :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


"You lie

But you lie quietly

You scream

But your screams are muted"

I think it should be in this particular part: You lie
but you lie quietly
You scream
But you scream silently


I don't know, sounds better to me :) Great write!


Posted 12 Years Ago


This is very passionate and emotional poem.. i really like the way you expressed the each thought. Title is different and i like it "But Alone"..
I specially like the last 8 lines:
"But you drive away
You fall
And you fall hard
You’re cold
With nothing to warm you
Stand tall
But stand alone
Forever alone"

Wonderful write, I'll be reading more!
Thanks for sharing.. Keep it up :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


it is very nice to mention contrasts because contrasts make things the clearest. if there is a black dot in a white wall, it appears clearly. i liked the way it was written although you mentioned some actions which can never happen without the other such as..you walk but you dont move..i dont think there is a person who can wake while not moving! nicely written, thank you for sharing

Posted 12 Years Ago


Where was the inspiration for this? It was great but what is it modeling?

Posted 12 Years Ago


I almost feel like I am looking at a momument, or a gravestone. Very nice.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on May 6, 2012
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Destinyxi
Destinyxi

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