Let you know if I like it? Ok, I like it. :) That was easy haha. Breakups always suck horridly, always has to be some roughness to them. But of course, it's two people who hjad feelings for one another at some point, so it's to be expected. Your words in this poem ring true, until time heals the wound, whether heartbeaker or heartbreakee, it's unavoidable to stumble across something that'll widen the tear in the gaping hole in your chest. Great work again, as always.
I love it! It's so well written and heartfelt. I love the passion put into your words, letting him know that "everything you see will remind you of me"...powerful emotions. I can relate to your poem, most people can; that's what makes it a wonderful write!
there are far too many great women writers out here today.. writing beautiful songs and poems.. about THIS GUY... but those wonderful writers never tell their readers.. they never allow the readers.. to hold the weight and measure.. to see for themselves.. exactly who THIS GUY is.. and why he sucks! (i know why he sucks.. but.. as a reader.. i want to hear it in a poem) again.. nice write! -s
outcomes and final measures means.. (sorry for not elaborating) I want to know just how much his choices hurt him.. and how they benefited you.. what his foolish choice left him without, and what it left you with..
you leave it up to destiny.. and that is what chastens us as the readers.. chastise the fool not the reader.. we are longing for the whole story but all we get is intent.. i want outcomes and final measures. (: LOVELY WRITE! -S
possessive, but missing a final impact or direction to explain the possession, its a wonderfully well thought out poem.. it has good metric.. i liked the form.. Keep it up! -s