I've answered this question a few times over the years hun...you mean the world to a lot of people and you would be devastatingly missed if you were no longer here...I'm not sure if it's addressed to anyone in particular but whenever I do read a poem of yours that has a lot of questions in it, I always think it's the same person...the last four lines really made me think, in fact, I'm still thinking about it...you sound confused...I've also lamented many times in the past over how much better you are at cheering me up than the other way around...but I'm here for anything you want to talk about, and always will be.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I was debating to put the last four lines actually. I had finished the poem, re read it, then added .. read moreI was debating to put the last four lines actually. I had finished the poem, re read it, then added them.
You cheer me up in your own way. And I'm very grateful for that
11 Years Ago
Always a pleasure my dear, I'm just glad I can help you in some way.
Writing is so much easier when down. It's one of those tragic truths of life I suppose. Nicely done poem. I feel lucky that this is the first that I have clicked on in ages and ages of being away from this whole thing.
If I were you, I'd take a look at the third to last stanza. Just one little place that felt sticky, but the rest is perfect the way that it is as far as I can tell.
great job
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Yeah, I agree that it's easier when you're down. When I'm happy I don't write as much.
.. read moreYeah, I agree that it's easier when you're down. When I'm happy I don't write as much.
I'm glad my poem was a first and that it didn't suck haha.
I looked at the third to last stanza, I agree it's not as smooth as the rest. But once I finish writing a poem, unless there's a typo, I don't touch it.
Thank you though Ees for reviewing :) I appreciate it
11 Years Ago
Hahah.
that's cool, just throwing it out there.
I don't write s**t when I am happy unles.. read moreHahah.
that's cool, just throwing it out there.
I don't write s**t when I am happy unless it is some sort of insane manic sort of happy- delusional stuff. haha.
I am super glad this was the first I got to read after being away for so long!
I've answered this question a few times over the years hun...you mean the world to a lot of people and you would be devastatingly missed if you were no longer here...I'm not sure if it's addressed to anyone in particular but whenever I do read a poem of yours that has a lot of questions in it, I always think it's the same person...the last four lines really made me think, in fact, I'm still thinking about it...you sound confused...I've also lamented many times in the past over how much better you are at cheering me up than the other way around...but I'm here for anything you want to talk about, and always will be.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I was debating to put the last four lines actually. I had finished the poem, re read it, then added .. read moreI was debating to put the last four lines actually. I had finished the poem, re read it, then added them.
You cheer me up in your own way. And I'm very grateful for that
11 Years Ago
Always a pleasure my dear, I'm just glad I can help you in some way.
As always, your writing is spot on and evokes strong sensations. I find it hard to think that anyone would find it hard to miss you at all, since you rock. This was a great poem, and I hope that writing your thoughts out helped give you some peace of mind.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Johnny boy. I'm glad you liked it :)