Away

Away

 

I remember how you made me feel

Like I was the only one

 

How great it was to have all your attention

How privileged I felt

 

I wanted more than you could have given me

And I deserved more

I walked

I left

 

I ran

 

You made me feel so special

So lucky

 

But I became dependent

And we couldn’t have none of that

Or I couldn’t

 

So I escaped

 

Now you’ll never see me again

 

You’ll never hear me sound the way I used to

 

And I don’t feel the same

I’m not the same

 

I’m not the little girl who enveloped herself in your arms

 

I’m the woman who you’re unable to grasp

 

You were privileged to share a few months of my life

 

You’re now an idiot for not giving me what I wanted

Because now you’ll never get what you want

 

And I will

I have

And it’s not you

 

Thank God for that

Author's Note

I haven't written in awhile, I haven't been inspired.

I get inspired randomly, this was one of those times.

Enjoy, let me know what you think :)

Reviews

[Horizons]

A beautiful splendid piece i read. I loved how you converted your feelings into the words. I felt how you expressed yourself through this piece of peace. Well done, great job, it's really a powerful piece. Somehow, some emotions're too floating over the piece. You've well structured some memories of someone's past into the great words. That's all i just got and i liked your flow. Brilliant job!

[Monica]

Good work :) Feels like you have just written about a piece of my past! You wrote it with strength, confidence, and heart.

Well done!

[KAOlmsted]

"And we couldn’t have none of that..." -meh, not loving the double negative, but that's probably just me ;-)

"You're now an idiot..." xD tell us how you really feel!

Nice piece, K...thanks for sharing.

[Mazie Tackett]

Preach it girl! We all have that little school girl in us that craves that feeling where we know we aren't in this alone, that we have someone to take care of us. This part of us is really strong, but it doesn't have to control us. We have an independant woman in us too, you just have to help her come out. You just did that and portrayed the event beautifully. Great write and even better read. Thanks for sharing it. You don't need to rely on those random inspirations. People can be magnificent for inspiration. Thoughts, scenery, animals, even sitting down and reliving your past can lead to wonderful writings. However, don't forget that everything doesn't have to be serious. Sit down and just write something silly. You will be surprised at what happens.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story in the poem. Sometime we get lucky and escape before it is too late. I like the complete tale and the positive ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Destinyxi]

thank you for reviewing :)

[Steven]

God, not this again, lol.. Write something sexy or something.

[Destinyxi]

lol honey if you've got nothing good to say, don't say it at all :P

[Steven]

Calling me honey again? ;) I said a lot of good there

[Destinyxi]

really? Must be blind ;)

[Steven]

I gave you credit for being able to write something sexy. See, you just have to look harder.. ;)

[Destinyxi]

right right, mkay

[Steven]

of course I'm right..

[外人 (Gaiji..]

That's sad :(
Sadly, that's an easy poem to relate to

[Steve]

I am the same. Its been a while. And when it does happen its nice in a creative cool kind of way.

I like this. Its inspiring.

[Destinyxi]

Thank you, glad you like it!

[Steve]

Sounds like the guy in this writer royally screwed up and you got away unscathed. Good for you.

[kublakhan27]

A lot of your "random" inspirations seem to revolve around unmet expectations, especially in romantic matters...hopefully all is sweeter with you than the bitterness of your words would suggest...well done Kels :)

[Destinyxi]

Thank you Steve :D

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure :D

[Invisible]

"I get inspired randomly, this was one of those times."

does this mean my inspiration to talk like a pirate again is acceptable? or should I go with old-timey? Yar! M'lady. may I kiss your hand in a gesture of respect? Walk the plank!

nice poem.

[Destinyxi]

I never mentioned anything about inspiration being acceptable or not. But sure that sounds acceptable.

Thanks for reviewing

[Invisible]

yep