Inside Me

Inside Me

 

You want to get inside my head

You never know what I’m thinking

You never know what I’m feeling

And you’re dying to know

You’re dying to crawl under my skin

And realise what keeps me going

 

You want to know if I think about you

When you’re not around

You want to know if I will reach out to you

When you start to miss me

And you test me

But I never pass

Because I don’t let you win

 

You try to see behind my eyes

See what I see

See things from my side

From my point of view

But it’s so hard

Because one look at my eyes

And you’re drowning in a pool of milk chocolate

 

You try to see behind my smile

Maybe I’m hiding something

But you can’t get past the bright white teeth

And my pink lips spread so wide

You’d rather just sink in

And get lost

Than figure me out

 

You’ve gone days and nights

Wondering about me

How can you get close

How can you make me feel

The way you feel

You examine me like you would an exam

Trying to get yourself that A+

But always ending up with a C-

 

And you study till I’m pushing at the walls of your mind

Till I’m leaking out of your ears

Till I’m pushing at the back of your eyes

Till I’m trying to escape through the gaps in your teeth

Trying to push your tongue off my head and make a run for it

You study me till I’m sucked into your brain

Bouncing off of pink clouds

Taken away by red water

Flowing through your veins

And I know every inch of you

I see inside you

I am inside you

 

But after all this

Capturing me inside you

You still are far away

From finding your way inside me

Author's Note

Another way of describing how to get under someones skin :P

Enjoy!

Reviews

[Bare Trees]

(realize)
Well, I certainly wouldn't want to be the unlucky guy in your life. LOL This type of torture sounds worse than holding ice cream back from a child while dangling a scrumptious bowl of it in his face. The last stanza could use some work. Your depictions describe a woman who loves to hold back her feelings, funny enough, woman always want to know what her man is feeling most of the time. Interesting poem and something to ponder. Good write.

[Destinyxi]

Realize is the American way of writing it, Realise is the English way :P Both are correct.
read moreRealize is the American way of writing it, Realise is the English way :P Both are correct.

Thanks for your review!

[Bare Trees]

AH HA!!! So, still getting into men's heads ay. hahahahaha. lol You're welcome.

[Destinyxi]

Psh how am I getting into men's heads? :P Because I proved you wrong? haha

[Bare Trees]

Maybe? I don't know. haha

[Destinyxi]

Haha, that might be it =P

[Bare Trees]

;)

[Adam :P]

good write

[Destinyxi]

Thank you!

[Heather]

soo beautiful and honest words
well done :)

[Destinyxi]

Thanks so much!

[soliloquy]

Well, this is different. I can't honestly tell if you want this person or not?

Probably not. But maybe you had feelings anyway?

Good write.... Since it made me think.

[Destinyxi]

Deep down, I do haha. Thanks for the review!

[soliloquy]

So, I got it right? That is unusual. :0)

[kublakhan27]

Two poems in two days...you're on a roll my dear :) This is a phenomenal piece, I love how you use the "formal" metaphors like school grades to get this message across..the second-to-last verse is brilliant...I can't really explain how but this works as a more - what's the word I'm looking for - refined counterpart to the previous poem, which leaves considerably less to the imagination ;P They're both great though at what they do...and I find myself relating to elements of this one, dare I say it...

[Destinyxi]

I know haha. And I was struggling to write just one poem a few nights ago. Thanks for the review Steven!

[kublakhan27]

Haha that's how it usually goes, never rains but pours, I'm the same :P Always a pleasure to review your stuff Kels :)

[gombeggar]

interesting take on things, girl...'pool of chocolate milk' behind yer eyes? interesante, bonita ;)

[Destinyxi]

thank you!!

[Baby Ricochet]

When I saw the title I thought, well you know what I thought. Not quite what I was expecting. Great Poem though. I liked the 6th stanza best. The part about pushing on minds and eyeballs. I wrote one called "Days I can't say" that was themed on people trying to pry into memories I don't want to talk about. It's not about the same thing really but it does share a common theme. I'll PM it to you. Thanks

[Kes]

"And you study till I’m pushing at the walls of your mind
Till I’m leaking out of your ears
Till I’m pushing at the back of your eyes
Till I’m trying to escape through the gaps in your teeth
Trying to push your tongue off my head and make a run for it"

That's my favourite bit by far. I adore the whole poem, but this bit stands out for me. I could just see and feel every line of it. Amazing.
Great work!
K

[Destinyxi]

Thank you so much Kes!

[Kes]

My pleasure. x

[That_Girl]

Well look at this little piece of perfection haha

"
And you study till I’m pushing at the walls of your mind
Till I’m leaking out of your ears
Till I’m pushing at the back of your eyes
Till I’m trying to escape through the gaps in your teeth
Trying to push your tongue off my head and make a run for it
You study me till I’m sucked into your brain
Bouncing off of pink clouds
Taken away by red water
Flowing through your veins
And I know every inch of you
I see inside you
I am inside you" That's pretty damn amazing, I must say. It's just... so overbearing that it's pleasurable. Like a n****e twist. If you're into that haha

I hope that made sense... O.O

[Destinyxi]

LOL OH MY GOD IM DYING OF LAUGHTER. A N****E TWIST! LOOOOOL OH GOD.

hahahaha.

Thank you Avy. I really like this poem too. It's creative haha. And it describes the inside of the human body in a non gory way =D like pink clouds! =D

[That_Girl]

Heh... it's the first thing that came to mind. :)

Very very good. :) Yummmmmmmy like cotton candy!

[Destinyxi]

mm cotton candy. Yknow I'm craving chocolate so bad right now haha

[That_Girl]

Hahaha gives me dirty thoughts. F**k, I really gotta go haha


Talk later lovey. :)

[Destinyxi]

sounds good chicky!