Rotting Casket

Rotting Casket

 

You think you know me

Damn, you don’t know me

You have no clue

Who I am

Where I’ve been

What I’m about

 

So you’ve seen me

You’ve spent time with me

But are you inside me?

 

Stop forcing your opinions

Of myself

Onto me

I don’t need that

Not from you

And not from anyone

 

You lash out at me

Because you’re unhappy

Well keep your foul mouth

For someone who deserves it

Someone like yourself

 

You think you’re better than me

You’re so put together

I see you

I see through you

You’re just muscle, skin, and bone

That’s it

You have no personality

And if you did

You’d be a first class a*s

 

I don’t need you in my life

And hell

You don’t deserve me writing about you

But alas

Here I am

 

Foul mouthed, piece of s**t

 

I hope you take these words

To your grave

And when the earth welcomes you

I’ll drip rotten petals

Over your casket

 

Making me live in such misery

You will die in misery

Without a soul to mourn your life

Your miserable little life

And first class a*s personality 

Author's Note

God blessed me with enough patience to deal with idiots, so thank you for that.

Enjoy!! And REVIEW!

Reviews

[Jibey]

You certainly find a powerful medium for putting down this guy.. and the venom spits out in an energetic and insistent manner... I liked the image of dripping rotten petals over his casket... or maybe you were dripping s**t on him from your own petal... just sayin' :-)

[ZeeArsonist]

I felt the hurt and anger towards this "a*s". it felt very personal and honest. one suggestion would be to look back over a few lines that may sound too "predictable"? Don't get me wrong, i really enjoyed reading....i think you can go deeper. Get it girl!

[Kes]

And when the earth welcomes you
I’ll drip rotten petals
Over your casket

Ooh that bit sent shivers down my spine! I loved the repetition of 'first class a*s' too, that's pretty funky. :)
Love it, as usual. Keep up the hard work!
K

[Destinyxi]

Haha, I forgot I even repeated that part. Thank you for your review Kes!

[Kes]

My pleasure. :) x

[Baby Ricochet]

Intense. Thanks

[kublakhan27]

Wow, this is the angriest example of "patience" I've ever read :P But you're right...it's usually better to simply write these things out as opposed to lashing out verbally (though maybe you've already done that too, I'm not sure haha) That's always been the most therapeutic way of getting things off my chest...whenever I've tried mouthing off over something, I usually get so worked up that I start tripping over my tongue and become more of a laughing stock than I already was...so I appreciate your willingness to put that raw emotion out there, though I wish you did not have such a person hanging around, then you could devote your writing to more positive things...of course, your negative stuff is usually so deliciously bitter that I'd never want you to totally abandon that style haha Anyways I'm kind of rambling today for lack of sleep, but you get the idea...it's a great emotional piece but it's unfortunate you needed this kind of person around to feel the necessity to write it in the first place...

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true in the poem. Never know what the person had seen and done in a life next to you. Best to respect all people and listen. A good listener will make many friends and learn what is true or not. Some good wisdom to be learn in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Steven]

"And when the earth welcomes you
I’ll drip rotten petals
Over your casket"

Damn.. Write more lines like THAT!

[Destinyxi]

Haha, I'll try Steve!

[That_Girl]

I wish I had said patience lol

This is like a slap in the face. A really hard b***h slap. You're right, he doesn't have a f*****g clue and certainly doesn't deserve you. First class a*s- love that.

Also, the stanza about dripping petals was pretty damn epic. Your writing is so bold, I love it. :D

[Destinyxi]

Yeah a hard b***h slap to the idiotic b*****d. :P

[Hester Vane]

Brilliant! It made me smile the whole way through, I also feel god blessed me with enough patience to deal with idiots! Thank goodness because there are alot of them around! Great write once again!

[Destinyxi]

There are definitely a lot of them around! haha

[gombeggar]

it is good to express yerself...much better than holding it all in...it should be cleansing to release...hope that is the case for u...

this is a seething release in words, but controlled enuff...cuz i've seen expressions not so creative-ly be released

[Destinyxi]

Yeah definitely controlled, or I would be swearing left and right

[gombeggar]

heheh...well, swearing on occasion and when needed works too