I don't know if it's all my friends going out to Halloween parties, or my family going out to other family members homes, or the multiple arguments I've gotten into lately, but I'm feeling lonely as a single grape.
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Well, I would rather have been alone tonight than gone on a s****y date, haha. She drank too much and then got really bitchy with the wait staff. Then she put money on the table when the check came, and walked out without saying anything. I was kindof glad, but when I left five tminutes later she was waiting outside and acted like everything was cool... Hahaha.. God.. But it was fun checking out the costumes.
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12 Years Ago
Jeez dude.... what the eff did you do wrong? XD jk jk
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Asked her out! XD
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Hahaha uh huh. Suuuuuure. ;)
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:D
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Lol wow is everyone having a bad Halloween? Lol wow dude. Sorry about the girl. And sorry for intrud.. read moreLol wow is everyone having a bad Halloween? Lol wow dude. Sorry about the girl. And sorry for intruding. Lol i had a bad friday night. Saturday was better.
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Haha that sounds like quite the date Steven.
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Mm. Ive had better ;). But a couple dressed up as a geisha and a flying monkey walked by and smile.. read moreMm. Ive had better ;). But a couple dressed up as a geisha and a flying monkey walked by and smiled at us through the window. That made it bearable
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lol a flying monkey xD hahaha sounds awesome.
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Sounds like wifey material :P
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Yes, I should marry that girl and become a normal, unhappy America :)
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Hahaha what an insult to Americans xD tsk tsk
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*American
:p
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It's the only culture I know ;)
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That's not true! I'm not American X.X
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But I don't know Canadian culture. If I did I'd probably say something like, become a normal, aloof.. read moreBut I don't know Canadian culture. If I did I'd probably say something like, become a normal, aloof Canadian ;)
All joking aside, if I had the money to get on a plane to Montreal, I'd be at your door tomorrow. I've been in your shoes often enough to know that, frustrating as it is, these are the times that usually produce a writer's finest moments. This is the best one you've written in a while *hugs*
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*hugs back* Thank you, it's different than my recent poems, more emotional haha.
No worries love, you always have me *hugs you tightly* I'm sorry you feel so lonely. But I suppose it's what makes the poem so good. Your emotions are bold and clear. Lovely job. :)
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*hugs back* I know I always have you =D You have me too :) Thanks for your review!
'i pat myself on the back' lovely line...and yes i did enjoy yer poem...i understand alone...but for everything there is a reason and something to be learned in and of itself
I did enjoy the poem, but I did not enjoy how sad it was or how lonely you are! True, one's own self can sometimes be all the company that we need, but it wears on ya when you see everyone else with everyone else. However, I must say, if people ain't hanging out with you they're really missing out! Hope you're not lonely for too long.
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It does wear on you. Thank you John, you're always too sweet to me haha.
Thanks for rev.. read moreIt does wear on you. Thank you John, you're always too sweet to me haha.
Thanks for reviewing :)
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Heh, I am no such thing! :P Thanks for sharing this on here, I love reading your work.
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You are too, don't even bother denying it. I have proof of this constant sweetness! :P
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Do not! It's uhhh... simple, commonplace gentlemanliness?
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Haha you wish John. It's your sweet kind personality ;)
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*rolls eyes* You're delusional lass, there's no sweetness here.
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Want me to pull out the proof? I have tons.
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See? I'm not the only one who thinks it!
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Oy, both you lasses dunno what you're talking about! >.>
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psh Avy and I know exactly what were talking about.
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I have probably a hundred messages of your sweetness saved.
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Y'all are making me facepalm myself!
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O.o you save my sweetness?! I mean, alleged sweetness?
We all feel lonely at one time or another, sometime for long stretches at a time. I often feel it around holidays but at times it hits me out of the blue and I go through a bit of depression. Yes, I've held my own hand many times and felt that loneliness listening to the distant chatter. Good poem.
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Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Halloween isn't that bad, when Christmas comes around or Valentines day, they're killers haha. Thank.. read moreHalloween isn't that bad, when Christmas comes around or Valentines day, they're killers haha. Thanks for your review
At the end of the third stanza down, I would center the wiord "Memory" to enhance its importance. I'm having a "freedom night" so I'm jumping around reviewing s**t left and right, haha. My chickadee's in town so I've got free time, but I've heard this lonely halloween thing on a few other pages. Instead of "I can't go without myself" it would be so much more haunting if you wrote "I can't go within myself" and then carry into a line about that being because of the loneliness there. Lots of people are lonely tonight it seems. Enjoy it, it's the best time to soul-search and write.
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Haha one thing I noticed about your reviews James, you always want to change my work xD Once it's wr.. read moreHaha one thing I noticed about your reviews James, you always want to change my work xD Once it's written and posted, unless there is a spelling mistake, I don't touch it.