Falling Heaven

Falling Heaven

 

You wanted to make a bet

The person who falls first

Loses

 

Let me suck in my pride

And admit

I lost

 

I fell for you

I’m still falling for you

And you just don’t have a clue

 

I act the way you do

All tough and emotionless

But inside there are butterfly wings

Whispering against my stomach

Every time I see you

 

I don’t know how long

I can keep up this act

I don’t know how long

I can mirror your actions

 

It’s killing me inside

Watching you with others

It’s killing me inside

Being without you

 

I just don’t know what to do

I don’t know what to say

I don’t know how to be

If not with you

 

You beat me

My darling

You won

I lost

Your prize is my heart

My prize is ridding of it

So you can’t hurt me

Because you will hurt me

I know that much

And I’ll let you

To experience just a bit

Of paradise 

Author's Note

Honestly, writing this poem could have been the last thing I've ever done. Right after I finished writing it, we had an earthquake that I think scraped off 5 years of my life x.x

Reviews

[J. Viands]

Beautiful it’s like where all the erotica you write comes from a great insight to the author

[Ees]

Nice poem!
Gosh, reading this is so relatable to me. I am certain that if we knew eachother in real life we'd get along beautifully or hate eachother for some of our similarities.

Well written. I get it. Great job.

[de_maruf]

awesome
i liked it

[axel]

you write really well, this is awesome,

[Jibey]

Was it a real or a metaphorical earthquake? Assuming it was real, this was a nice poem to leave as a memorial to the fluttering of your heart...

You bring out well the uncertain pains of uncertain love

[Baby Ricochet]

THis poem caused an earthquake!! God god woman why did you post such a dangerous piece?!?!

[Steven Cash]

I love this

Soft romance. Nice change of pace from your normal, without loosing your skill

BIg ups!

92/100

[soliloquy]

You had an earthquake? Wow. I havent expereince that!

This write is powerful. U correctly capture this painful situation. I was there once and it sucked...but it felt like paradise at time too.

[gombeggar]

understandable about the earthquake...u rocked the pillars of the world with such a change in yer poetry ;)

[kublakhan27]

I don't remember you telling me about an earthquake :P Butterflies whispering into one's ear would be a sweet and peaceful thing, but not so much when they're the ones that hide out in one's stomach and choose the worst situations to make their presence known...nice work Kels, and thank heavens you're still here :)