Falling Heaven

Falling Heaven

 

You wanted to make a bet

The person who falls first

Loses

 

Let me suck in my pride

And admit

I lost

 

I fell for you

I’m still falling for you

And you just don’t have a clue

 

I act the way you do

All tough and emotionless

But inside there are butterfly wings

Whispering against my stomach

Every time I see you

 

I don’t know how long

I can keep up this act

I don’t know how long

I can mirror your actions

 

It’s killing me inside

Watching you with others

It’s killing me inside

Being without you

 

I just don’t know what to do

I don’t know what to say

I don’t know how to be

If not with you

 

You beat me

My darling

You won

I lost

Your prize is my heart

My prize is ridding of it

So you can’t hurt me

Because you will hurt me

I know that much

And I’ll let you

To experience just a bit

Of paradise 

Author's Note

Honestly, writing this poem could have been the last thing I've ever done. Right after I finished writing it, we had an earthquake that I think scraped off 5 years of my life x.x

Reviews

[AleyshaRosa]

What an interesting poem to have as what could have been your last...
The poem is beautiful, with a twist that I didn't expect.
Well done

Koodoos

[M.M.I]

It's a terrible thing to feel unwanted. So much thought in this one, almost like a riddle. I liked this line: You wanted to make a bet
The person who falls first
Loses

Let me suck in my pride
And admit
I lost

[dunnia]

this is a very nice and deep poem hope you didnt get hurt in the earthquake

[Coyote Poetry]

Your poem is true about life. Must know pain and pleasure to test love. love is hard to find and maintain. I enjoyed your thoughts and the strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[LittleLover]

The pains of loving, and not being loved back. A greta poem, full of emotion, sadness, and heartbreak. Great job
100/100

[The Flame of the Knight]

This is a good piece. I enjoyed it. It speaksbto the pained heeart. Good job.

[Jodie Ng]

This poem is amazing because it captures the defeat of love and the longing for someone. The last stanza is amazing! Beautiful!

[B-poet]

To welcome pain to be loved is the question at the end of this poem. You've conveyed that brillantly. I wonder why though people will love someone that hurts them emotionally and mentally. Whatever strengthens this type of attraction is the million dollar question. Great poem. :)

[Sourav]

Nice romantic poem... full of passion and love... a good read.

[khalid]

alot of love and passion feelings mixed with some pain and disappointment but frankly it is really nicely penned