Metal Puppet

Metal Puppet

 

I wake in the morning

And get out of bed

Get dressed

Eat breakfast

No, not because I want to

Not because I’m hungry

It’s routine

 

Out the door before it’s late

Walking on the sidewalk

No need to look up

I know where I’m going

I don’t know why

It’s just routine

 

Don’t need to think twice

I do what I need to do

I don’t do it for myself

Oh no

I do it because I always have

It’s burned into my mind

The steps I’ve taken

But a million times

The movements so familiar

So robotic

 

Pull my strings

Look, I dance

A little puppet

But aren’t we all?

 

How do I know I’m alive?

Ah well

I feel

I feel pain

It helps me feel alive

The gnawing inside my stomach

Right on the side

Takes my breath away

I know where I need to go

So I’ll go

And the pain will just have to wait

Wait its turn

For my attention

 

I’m on a schedule

I’m on a timeline

I’ve got things to do

Places to go

People to see

 

This pain keeps me alive

While I’m the walking dead

A puppet to life

Pull my strings

Look, I dance

 

Don’t you see

We’re all

Just dancing

 

Our strings being pulled

And we’re moving

We don’t know why

But we are

 

Whether we’re a wooden puppet

Or a metal robot

 

We’re constantly on the go

And we just

Don’t

Know

Why

Author's Note

This poem popped into my head when I was walking home from school, I suffer from stomach pain, and I was feeling pretty numb, the only thing that kept me tied to reality was this pain in my stomach.

I also thought I'd write about something other than men and erotica. It seems that's all I've been writing about lately, kinda sucks.

Anyway, Enjoy :)

Reviews

[Crazy Cat Man]

have u gone to the doctor yet? go see a doctor...stop being stubborn lol


as for the poem. i like it a lot. we do feel like drones sometimes when we are just stuck to a routine and nothing really going on with our lives. we have to find a reason to keep going. A love helps :) great piece

[Destinyxi]

No, been stalling it, still haha. One of my friends is so pissed off at my stubborness, he blackmailed me and pissed me off xD

[Crazy Cat Man]

please see the doctor. its very important. it could save ur life. what are u afraid of?

[Destinyxi]

Afraid of doctors lol

[Crazy Cat Man]

Come on its ur health. Its very important. Do u want ur pain to continue in ur stomach or not.

[Destinyxi]

Dan, you are stubborn eh

[Crazy Cat Man]

your the stubborn one. u refuse to see a doctor for your stomach pain. which doesnt make sense. i had a eye infection lol i went to the eye doctor Boom problem solved

[Destinyxi]

but an eye doctor is different x.x

[Crazy Cat Man]

Doesnnt matter i had pain inmy eye. It hurt a lot and needed extensive eye dropsto heal. U should go.

[Destinyxi]

yeah yeah

[Crazy Cat Man]

its up to u if u want to keep living with stomach pain and not doing anything about it.

[kublakhan27]

This is indeed a more introspective piece than usual for you, but it's nice to explore new themes once in a while...pain is the most definitive affirmation of life, and it really comes through in this piece. Hope you're feeling better btw :)

[Destinyxi]

haha, yes I seem to be fine today. which is a relief :P

Thanks for your review hun :) You should link me or message me the title of your new work so I can look through them after I'm done this work.

[kublakhan27]

That's good, I'm glad to hear you're feeling better, and as always, you're welcome for the review :) The last two things I've posted are Remedial Sun and The Invalid, though I should forewarn you that the latter is a longer piece, so you may need a little time for that one :)

[de_maruf]

fine

[Destinyxi]

thanks :)

[Hester Vane]

Great use of metaphor in this poem! Brilliant as always!

[Destinyxi]

Always with the metaphors haha. Thank you!

[J. Viands]

Loved it who can’t relate to it

[Destinyxi]

Thank you! =D

[B-poet]

I can truly relate this great piece. Constantly wandering, being a socialized consumer, off the to gas station, place of employement, yadda yadda. The pain to make more money and gain what we haven't gotten yet from hard work and sweat. Great work again. This one hits home for me. :)

[Destinyxi]

I'm glad haha. It's kind of sad how half the time we're like zombies, always doing the same thing over and over.

Thanks for your review!

[That_Girl]

Not too sure why you're trippin about the erotica... I love the way you write it. :) However, I am glad that your pain is no longer due to some idiot guy. Now to take away the stomach pains... hmmm. ;) Lovely poem! Very relatable. :)

[Destinyxi]

Haha not tripping about it, I love writing it, but I noticed that it's all I've been writing so far, wanted to break out and write something different.

Thank you Avy! Glad you liked it :)

[axel]

at last something different, nice though, funny as i think of the irony,good poem

[Destinyxi]

Yes, at last :P Glad you liked it!

[John Stussy]

Great poem, I liked how you conveyed the concept of us all being puppets to our own routine. Go out and do something spontaneous, daring, dangerous. Anarchy, baby! Was different than what you usually write, but you penned another awesome poem.

[Destinyxi]

Yeah, I think I ought to break out of this routine :P
Thanks for your review Johnny Boy!

[John Stussy]

Any time, if you weren't so bloody far away I'd invite you along for the adventure of a lifetime! Well, maybe that's a bit of an overstatement, it's just a roadtrip this weekend to get music supplies, but for us musicians going on the trip it'll be the adventure of a lifetime!