Dripping Petals

Strong language used

Dripping Petals

 

Are you lying to me?

Or am I lying to you?

Who’s lying to who?

 

I can’t take the bullshit

I can’t take any of it

You got something to say?

Say it to my damn face

 

You’re unsure of where were going

That’s fine

So am I

But don’t slap me in the face

And tell me you don’t know

Because I know

Oh, I know

I know it’s all a game

Checkmate b***h

I’m going to win

 

You think I’m going to be embarrassed

From showing you my body

Showing you what I’ve got

Flaunting it

Ah, babe

I saw your stuff too

And let me tell you

I’ve seen better

 

 

I can’t befriend your friends

You’re scared we won’t work out

Aw honey

We will work out all right

I’ll work you out till you’re f*****g dust

Gonna shove a stake through your heart

Pull it out

Meaningless pile of dusted vamp

Gonna slay the hell out of you

And every other blood sucking mother f****r

Who crosses my path

 

I’ll tell you if it’s going to work out

I’ll tell you if it’ll last

It’s all up to me, dick

All up to me

 

Try to hurt me with your words

I’ve got mine mastered

Want to mess with a writer?

Come at me, prick

I’ll cut you up with words

Then I’ll hammer your leftovers

You’re going to blend into the ground

Fertilizer for my flowers

 

Red

Dripping

Prickly

Roses

 

Ah, babe, don’t you like my garden? 

Author's Note

I know it's my second 'grrr' poem in 2 days, if I get repetitive, please let me know guys.

I had to write another poem, got angry, needed to vent. (Wanted to share it with you guys as well)

Reviews

[John Stussy]

The whole thing was awesome! Never smart to get into words with a writer and expect to win haha. The edge to this poem was rigid, coldly confident. I liked the comparison to vampires and slaying any of those bloodsuckers, and loved the way it ended. Great work again Destiny.

[Hester Vane]

Checkmate B***h! Brilliant as always!

[Kes]

Haha, I love this! Sharp and sassy as ever!
K

[Destinyxi]

thank you! =D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, I like this mainly because you let all of your recent emotions pour on onto the piece and let the audience see a little bit of what you were going through. Guys can be difficult sometimes. They make me mad too, and I tend to cuss and scream because they're so dang confusing. One minute they're sure that you're the one for them, then the next they're hanging over some girl. I just wish you the best luck, girl!! You have talent with writing and hold that against them! :) Great job, like always.

"Want to mess with a writer?" I really love that line. That sounds like something I'd personally say. Haha XD

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Destinyxi]

I love that part too haha. I'm thinking of writing a poem about how awesome writers are xD

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Haha that'd be a great poem, if you do definitely send me a read request!! :)

[Destinyxi]

I will :D

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Okay, good!! :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow i am scared to leave a review in case this was about the guy who reviewed your last piece................seriously a great angry rant full of emotion, hurt and anger full in the face.

[Destinyxi]

haha no definitely not about a guy who reviewed my last piece. Thanks for your review!

[Wakeofahero]

Liked it a lot this was awesome. You diced him up I'll be honest lol. But I have one thing, the checkmate part should just say "check b***h, I'm going to win," or "checkmate b***h, I've already won," aside from the flaw in chess. This was f*****g awesome. My favorite part was when you said you will make him fertilizer for the flowers, then asked if he liked the garden.... I was like yesssssssss he's so dead to her. It reminded me of that one movie Johnny Depp was in when he is a writer and buries his ex in the garden... Totally bad a*s

[Destinyxi]

I looked that part over too xD But what I meant by it was I already won the chess game, now I'm going to win another. Make sense?

The garden part I added right at the end, I'm starting to be glad that I did :)

Thanks for your review!

[Wakeofahero]

Hahaha alright, I got it, and yes the garden part was awesome.

[gombeggar]

u certainly did vent, girl ;) ...yer mood offset this poem, but i can see it's good work underneath the seething woman

[Destinyxi]

It wasn't my intention to have a flowing, graceful poem. This is more of a 'grr gotta get all emotions out' poem rather than a 'alright, let me make this poem flow'

thanks for your review!

[gombeggar]

hahaha...well done nonetheless ;)

[write4ever]

WOW!!!! that was intense!!! amazing job! keep up the great work you have obvious talent as a writer!!!!!

[Destinyxi]

Thank you! :D

[OctoberDawn]

Not to be a debbie downer, but this poem felt really rushed and almost too raw. I understand that hard times bring the best poems but I really feel like you need to take a few moments to really let the words come to you. Writing while flat-out angry always leads to pitfalls as far as composition. Just a thought

[Destinyxi]

The poem mirrors anger, I don't think anger is a very slow and at ease emotion :P

As for taking a few moments to let the words come to me, that seems a tad forced and more tailored. Angry poems aren't supposed to be tailored and proper. And you don't have time to take a few moments and think before you vent. You just vent.

Thanks for your review though haha :)

[OctoberDawn]

I'm not saying to take it slow, I understand that the point of the poem was to mirror anger. I'm just saying that the difference between a poem and a journal entry is that there is consideration with word choice and composition. Anyway just a thought once again, not trying to diss your work.