D in Killer

D in Killer

 

Come here

My sweet boy

Let me get high on you

High off of you

Shoot you into my bloodstream

Smoke you till my pupils dilate

Drink you till my words are but a mumble

 

You’re legit

My own personal legal drug

The best kind out there

The kind that gets me off

Gets me on

You make me fly boy

The sky’s the limit

But I’m in another universe

 

F**k the cops if they find me

Find us

Find you

They can’t have you

They can’t use you too

I’m addicted

Take me away from here

Drag me into another world

Your world

 

Ah boy you’re giving me bruises

Where you’re injected

You’re staining my teeth

Where you’re smoked

You’re poisoning my liver

When you’re drunk

 

I’m not here anymore

I’m gone

I’m flying

F**k red bull

You give me wings

 

My sweet boy

Stay here

I’m getting high on you

High off of you

Shooting you till I get bruises

Smoking you till my teeth turn yellow

Drinking you till my liver is poisoned

 

You’re my legit drug

Satan’s addiction

You’re the best kind out there

The kind that kills

Author's Note

This poem was inspired by Rihanna's music video "We found love".

Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[axel]

well, lets see, bonnie and clyde , could have got some inspiration from this, nice poem, i heard some time like this from ME AND MY BOYFRIEND sequel,kudos babe!

[Destinyxi]

thanks =D

[Matt Gandee]

Loved it. Tantalising, intriguing and confronting all at once. You're a hard hitter!

[Destinyxi]

haha, glad you liked it! thank you

[Hester Vane]

Wow, I would never have been able to create a poem this good from Rhianna music video! Great Job!

[Destinyxi]

Thank you =D

[Ees]

oooooh! Love it. Feel it. Understand it.
I am not familiar with Rihanna's song, (i cannot stand her voice) but I do so like this poem!

The first three lines are seriously killer! I especially love the use of: "sweet boy". Sounds like something I would call a man, ooops, I do. haha. love it. I feel like it really, really sets the tone.

I love the word "legit" in here. It sounds- well I cannot think of a better word than "real" except perhaps, "legit". Good use of language!

"Ah boy you’re giving me bruises
Where you’re injected"- typo, you meant "you've" rather than "you're".
and "Where you’re smoked"- same thing!

ahhh so dangerous and edgy and beautifully wrong!!! Amazing! Love this poem!
I would be honored if you gave me your opinion on my poem "somebody else" and "Exchange" if you have the time.

anyway wonderful poem.

[Destinyxi]

no haha. Those aren't typos. I literally meant 'you're' as in 'boy you give me bruises where YOU ARE injected' make sense? :P and I'll be sure to look over those poems tomorrow when my eyes aren't all sleepy :)

[Ees]

Oh yes, that does make sense that way, for some reason that was hard for me to see. Maybe think about writing it out like that? Or I am just on another planet today.
Thanks so very much, yeah, I'd love to hear your opinion on them because I related to this so much and I think that you can really write!
have a great night!

[Steven Cash]

Do you mean We All Want Love by Rhianna?

cause that end chant is EPIC DOPE

[Destinyxi]

no haha. It's her song 'we found love in a hopeless place'

[Steven Cash]

oh gotcha

[Bewitching Sensations]

Yikes.. very strong poem.. full of emotion!
Loved it.. x

[Destinyxi]

thank you! Glad you liked it :)

[Bewitching Sensations]

Always do enjoy your pieces babe xx

[gombeggar]

that's some heavy addiction u have there, girl ;)

[Destinyxi]

haha, it's more of a fictional poem. Was inspired xD thanks for your review!

[That_Girl]

Wow... this is incredible! Your style of writing is so unique... I absolutely adore it! This was kind of dark... really sultry. Nice!

[Destinyxi]

aww thank you girly! :)

[That_Girl]

:) Always a pleasure!

[Sakshi]

oooooooh...i like this one...
amazing flow...great use of "The kind that gets me off, Gets me on"
love it love it !!

[Destinyxi]

haha, thanks so much!

[kublakhan27]

More words of wisdom from Kels the Dominatrix ;) Sorry, that's the word that came to mind after I read it and considered the title for a moment...this certainly seems to be your literary niche though...I don't know of another writer personally that can take pure raunch and turn it into something as eloquently - even beautifully - poetic as you can. Which is a great quality to have cuz most writers don't have it :)

[Destinyxi]

ahahaha you've never called me that :P

I'm glad you liked it Steve. thank you very much for your review!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I guess it was a name several poems in the making :P You're very welcome :)

[Destinyxi]

lol oh I bet it was honey :P

[kublakhan27]

lol indeed ;)