Burning Bridges

I do NOT usually rhyme, bear with me >.<

Burning Bridges

 

Move on

I’ll move on too

Let me go

I’ll release you too

 

I’m all out of energy

My battery is running on empty

Efforts all wasted

New hurt created

 

Walk away

Leave my world grey

Cross the street

Leave me incomplete

 

We entwined and breathed

The same exact air

But now I long for freedom

Something we can’t share

 

And I waited

Would have rather been hated

At least then I would have known

And you would have shown

I wasn’t the one

And I would have gone

 

But time I did waste

Now I’m leaving in haste

Let me live while I’m young

Die when I’m old

No more being left in the cold

 

I’m chasing the sun

The heat

I’m nothing but done

New sheet

 

A whole new book to write in

I’m starting out fresh

I’m going places I’ve never been

Searching for different flesh

 

And I’m anywhere but here

Anywhere but near

The pain I cannot bear

From pain I must spare

 

I’ll see you when I’m older

When I’m stronger

When I can face facts

And put on an act

A fake smile just for you

A fake smile for two

 

I’m moving on

Release me

Must leave before dawn

Because I’m chasing the sun

The heat

Author's Note

What do you guys think? I don't usually rhyme my work..if you liked this poem, then should I write more poems that rhyme or stick to my usual style?

No format used, not all words rhyme :P I just rhymed randomly.

Reviews

[Kes]

I love this! The metaphor of chasing the sun is great. And I really liked the rhyming too, random or not. I just sometimes think it can add a bit of flow that it's difficult to create without - although you've always managed it brilliantly!
Great work!
K

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the flow of thoughts.
'A whole new book to write in
I’m starting out fresh"
Good to have an destination and the sun in view. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[kink]

luving rhyme..i luved every single stanza..fun in read :)

[SamanthaMarie]

I think it added more drama when you added non rhyming lines. Makes sure the readers paying attention, and when you read it aloud you have to kind of say it differently. I got the pain in this poem clearly, and the struggle for a new start. I thought it was beautiful, but all your work is beautiful! I'm never disappointed.

[Hester Vane]

I think the rhymes work well! I think you should definatley write more in this style to see what you can do! I liek your usual style too but its always good to experiment with different things! Good job!

[LuthienThalia]

I really like this one. I was in a situation much like this one last year. There's nothing quite like knowing that you're being strung along but not having enough oomph to get out of the situation by yourself.

You're rhyming was absolutely brilliant too!

[John Stussy]

You rhymed well, and the poem flowed greatly. So sad though, a lass as beautiful and awesome as you ought to have her pick of gents. You'll find someone better though, someone who will treat you as you deserve. Great work, as always comes from you!

[kublakhan27]

You can rhyme, Kels :) There are no limits on what you can write...you've proven to be pretty diverse as of late with the different styles you're presenting :)

Btw, are you getting my RRs? I haven't heard much from you on the last several things I've put out...then again, it's been a lot of experimental stuff so I don't know if that stuff does all that much for you lol :P

[Destinyxi]

Thank jesus I can rhyme then :P

I am getting your RRs, as well as everyone elses. I just haven't had time to go through them all yet, been slacking :P I'll get to it as soon as I can though.

Thanks for your review on this Steve

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes you can :) That's okay, I just wanted to make sure they were getting through...whenever you do read them though, let me know, even if they make no sense lol :P I like reviewing your stuff so I'l always try to offer a few words on anything you send :)

[That_Girl]

Even though there was no format, this came out really nice. The rhyming isn't forced and that's what matters. I love it! I think you should continue with your usual style AND add in some other stuff like this. :)

[Destinyxi]

I'll see if I'll make other poems that rhyme, was a pain in the a*s to not write the first thing that popped into my head and actually pay attention to what words rhyme lol.

Thanks for your review Avy!

[That_Girl]

Hahaha it can be at times! This about the guy we were talking about the other day?

Anytime. :)

[Destinyxi]

No, this is another one. The other guy I haven't spoken to much lately, he's on vacation :P (getting a nice break from him woo)

[That_Girl]

Ahhh. Haha nice! Well, regardless, great poem! Hope things work out. :) Don't you dare settle though. ;)

[Destinyxi]

Thank you, glad you liked it!

And not to worry, I don't plan to settle just yet :P