Burning Dreams

Burning Dreams

 

So you wanted more than I could give

You want something else

Something with more fire

If I were to let go, honey

You would get burned

 

You think to find better, find a stream of fireworks

Baby, be careful and don’t get burned

With the little balls you have

Running away when you want more

Instead of waiting for it to happen

When you can actually handle it

 

That’s alright, it’s not me you’re hurting

But do me one little favor

If you want to cut yourself out

Walk away from this wildfire

Then get the

F**k

Out

Of

My

Dreams

 

I don’t know what your plan is

I don’t know what you’re hoping to accomplish

But when you decide to pick up

Your s**t

And go

Go all the way

Not just halfway

Not just quarter way

Go completely and utterly

Take all of your wimpy a*s and leave

 

I don’t need you hanging around in my dreams

Knocking on the walls of my mind

Having my eyes flutter while I’m sleeping

Trying to get you out

 

I don’t need that

If you have something to say

Tell me when I’m awake

When I’m fully aware of your coward a*s

When I can show you

Just how fast

I can burn you

Which is what you wanted right?

More fire?

More flame?

I’ll show you fire and flame

 

I’ll show you what it feels like to get third degree burns, baby

Author's Note

Getting led on and let go isn't the funnest thing.

I've been having dreams about the guy who did it, or what I consider nightmares. I wake up from these nightmares more tired than I did when I went to bed the night before. As a way of trying to rid of all my bottled up anger, I wrote this poem.

Don't forget to check out the picture!

Let me know what you think :)

Reviews

[Tom]

Wow, I was reading this in my head and I could feel the anger, I was shouting it at one point. I can't say I empathise as I have never experienced this directly but as a way of feeling it by proxy this was an excellent piece. You elicit anger and hurt and then a sense of vengeance, it was a riotous ride, I really enjoyed it and was bloody glad it wasn't about me.

[C.]

I feel like I can relate to a lot of the poems that you write. I really liked this.

[Destinyxi]

aw haha, thank you for all your reviews! I really appreciate it!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, girl I'm right there with you! I've recently been having dreams about a guy that kept leading me on from weeks I even thought we would start dating. Then he let me go, so he could instead date another girl. I was one pissed off 15 year old girl in the whole world!! I just wanted to cuss him out.... I think I did actually. :3 I really like this since I could relate to it so each. I love reading your writing, since it captures so much anger and humor at the same time. Well done, indeed!!!XD

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[Chris]

That is definitely one way to take that pic.

Agree about being "knowingly" led on and it's not being "funnest". Sometimes it is thought and sometimes it really isn't - no excuses, life isn't about reasons just about what happens. Sometimes minds change over the oddest moments that make no real sense and sometimes it's only ONE mind that changed. The other one gets lost in the shuffle.

Guess peeps need to talk a bit more than they seem to BEFORE either begins to daydream of the other. It's a hard question with answers unique to moments and people.

[w]

Interesting piece.

Only thing that stands out to me is:

"Then get the
F**k
Out
Of
My
Dreams"

I would change it to:

Then
get the f**k
out
of my
dreams!

Just a suggestion though.

[Kes]

This is so angry - and I love it!
The last line is a slap across the face. It's amazing. :)
Keep up the hard work!
K

[Johnny Joe]

I like the fire in this poem

[Celestial Witch Child]

Whoa. Awesome.
Revise first the last line of the stanza to "you would get burned." It makes more sense than the current phrasing.

[Destinyxi]

Thank you, I was trying to figure out another way to say that line, looked funny to me haha. I fixed it. Thanks for your reviews!

[Celestial Witch Child]

Yep. (:

[That_Girl]

Damn, girl! That last line is explosive! VERY nice! I love this so much! :)

[Destinyxi]

Haha, the last line is my favorite!! Thank you for your review!

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Very well expressed. I liked very much the way you show your anger in this poem. "That's alright...." beautiful lines. Thanks for sharing. Intense feelings well pinpointed with powerful words.

[Destinyxi]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked this poem. And I was pretty darn angry when I wrote it, so I'm glad it showed :P